Heartbeat

this is my first poem in English writing. after from reading of Jess poems. i able to write it.

Heartbeat

Please come back to me

I am thirsty to see you

Forgive me for my mistakes

Without you none else can help me

Remember your promise to help

Now I am alone and sad

The time to help is here

I believe you will come

You're my helper,lover or Heartbeat.

Author's Note

your instructions will be make a poet from me.

Reviews

[A.marie.speaks]

This is a topic everyone can relate to. I like the line you've drawn between the person you need help from and a heartbeat. Very beautiful and hopeful piece of writing.

[Arman]

good life for you.

[Érenn]

I really like the fact that you are not shying away from a challenge and working on your English. Simply because English is also my second language. I like your poetry a lot. The emotions clearly portrayed and sometimes it's not all about fancy words or exceptional writing, but what message the writing carries Hope is present in the end even if the tone is sad, angry and depressed in the start.^^ I enjoyed the read ^^ Thank you for sharing ^^ Keep writing and keep me posted. I would love to read more of your works ^^

[Arman]

thanks very much.

[barleygirl]

I agree, Jess is a good writer & an inspiration to other writers . . . I'm proud of you for expressing yourself in English so well here! "I am thirsty to see you" is one of my favorite lines. Sometimes we don't ask for what we need in life . . . your poem is nice becuz the narrator is humble enuf to ask for help. I also like the hopefulness at the end. Great job! Keep going!

[Arman]

i am lucky by getting of your review. thanks so much, i appreciated it.

[Jess]

Thank you so much barleygirl. Its an honor. :)