should

should

A Poem by Emily is not found, she is but lost within herself

should it

should it feel this way

should i feel nervous

should i feel scared

 

shouldnt i feel happy

shouldnt i be thrilled

shouldnt my stomach be tangled

shouldnt i blush at every word

 

should i be afaid

should i feel nervous

should i be stressed

should i be overwhelmed

 

should it feel this way

 

should it

© 2011 Emily is not found, she is but lost within herself


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i love it :P

Posted 13 Years Ago


Nicely done, but I think punctuation could help a little here! Not everywhere, because I think the uninterrupted flow of questions is effective, but maybe an ellipsis after the first "should it...", and the first stanza could benefit from a few question marks or periods, while the second stanza with a slightly happier feel could use some exclamation marks maybe. If you don't want to do any of that, I think you should at least add an ellipsis before the last should it and end with a question mark like so:

"...should it?" You can't ask these questions out loud where people can hear it, so you have to use whatever you have to make people feel it in writing. I like it though!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Emily is not found, she is but lost within herself
Emily is not found, she is but lost within herself

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i am girl, i have many stories to tell, many things to figure out, i dont know what i want to do, or what skills i have. I would give you a general idea of what is going to be on this page but i reall.. more..

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