Eternity Found

10/40 Haiku String

Eternity Found

 

Desolate moments

Birds flying helter skelter

On gray face he crawled

 

 

Above planes flying

Outer darkness surrounding

Trough becomes a grave

 

 

Ocean running red

With the blood of lost comrades

With fishes they sleep

 

 

Longevity gone

Prolonged durability

Eternity found

 

 

Reviews

[Valentine]

Very nice..I am not into this type of wwriting..my mind I guess thinks in longer terms.Nice ..I like it..Kathie

[Helen Crutchett]

Beautifully done Nancy. Thank you for submitting this to Tovli's contest. I am finishing off this contest for her, not sure where Tovli is! I think she has flown the coop! lol

Helena :)

[Tammy]

Very nice...

[Shellie]

Lovely Nancy!!! my fave was the last verse. This is a really great Haiku!

[Tovli]

very nice, Nancy. One of your best poems. tovli

[Brett Campaigne]

"on grey face he crawled" I think that this is a monumental capture there, along with the whole poem which places us face to face with the anxiety and profundity of Being-towards-death.