Frail Features

What is to live, and to be known?

Every aspect of her feline elements was frail

People didn’t notice her much, 

A passerby could not see

That her skin was not just pale

But a little tinged.

They often dismissed

The little crinkle formed and released 

In the wake of greetings.

Her hair was rich with the color of ebony

Ending at the back of her head were delicate shrooms.

She wished grief upon nobody

And longed to be loved-

Casual smiles and hurried greetings weren’t enough

And the girl with all her frail features

Her body intact,

Wanted desperately to give herself away.

Reviews

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

By far my favorite piece you have written, I relate strongly to the cool cat portrayed inside this poem; this is beautiful my dear thank you :)

[Liban Jibril]

"Casual smiles and hurried greetings weren't enough" -so true, they so rarely are...Really nice, Jina :)

[alltheloveabove]

Wad mahadsantahay (?) :) lols.

[Liban Jibril]

?? so confused...? lol

[Chaos_Collector]

This poem is enriched with detail. The brush of this poem has painted a vivid image of this girl in my head. This girl sounds beautiful, can't help but wonder how some go unnoticed. Certainly different from my usual read, but in a good way.

Chaos_Collector

[alltheloveabove]

Thank you very much! :) Why did you feel it was different though?

[Chaos_Collector]

You're welcome :) Different as in the way you detail the poem. The structure of it and what you chose to write about

[Coyote Poetry]

Artwork and poem was amazing. The strong description gave life to the girl.
"She wished grief upon nobody
And longed to be loved"
No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[alltheloveabove]

Thank you very much Coyote! :)