too late

about a lady who waited so long and when she finally decided to move on it was TOO LATE

on a deserted island there she lays
'hello &goodbye to ships &boats she says
a smile followed by a tear &that's her day
she lives at a station out of time with no name
waiting for that call of nomad saying come what may!
hundreds of steps in the sand she made
wandering from side to side waiting for her fate
desperately hanging on the stars to guide her way
she sits there wondering why he is so late??
year after year her hair turned to grey
one morning she packed her dreams&hopes
turned off the stars &decided to the 1st ship she would say hey
day after day felt like decades...
a wish sealed with a tear &yet no ship passed there
there she rest surrounded by her dreams with the word TOO LATE on her grave.

Author's Note

what do you think?feel free to judge.thanks!!

Reviews

[SpokenWord]

I could take this poem in so many different ways. One way is to think she was right to wait on love, what if she didn't what if she was waiting on her soul mate. But then again how long do we wait, how long do we allow loves strength to carry us through? This could happen to any of us once we have fallen in love for time has no power over love. Great write.

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a bittersweet longing that plays like music through your words.. Vividly expressed and emotionally stunning, you create a life story that pulls us in and makes us wish there were always happy endings.. Powerful...

[DeViouS]

A very well written warning. So sad but well done

[Mauricio Montoya]

very sad piece, like how it comes together with amazing flow.
Excellent write.

[Gone]

Wow. So sad and such a warning. Once again your poetry has moved my emotions. either I'm getting soft or your work is very good. I suspect the latter because I can still look a begging dog in the eye while enjoying my burger! :)

[Nothing Personal]

The message is very important. It is a poem with a moral of the poem. Good job in how you kept the rhyme and used visual help to keep it flowing :-)

[smile]

Meaningful and Intense! I HAVE NO WORDS TO PRAISE THIS PIECE OF WRITING AS IT IS
SO EXCEPTIONAL.You have an excellent flow and vivid imagery.

[Moflo]

I like this one. You were able to keep that rhyme going well. It really has great descriptions in it as well, forming a symbolic message about life in general. Nice write.