the lion's share

inspired by a shakti mantra

to romance her, the muse as brahma

defined by a gleaming heart

she implodes as a waterfall

turned inside out

all it took was the same

lone, longing that pervades all senses

in equa=balance

 

pedestrian, we walk the same

lines of time and finite struggles

 

who among you has stayed

to cheer on wealth belonging only

to your self? when your Self can

find every note's bliss

as a dancer's dream

confides?

Reviews

[Bluet_Belle]

I LOVE THAT FIRST VERSE!!!

In a strange way this reminds me of Rumi, something about your wording and structure remind me of some of his work.


GREAT poem!!!

[Emily B]

Beautiful. Absolutely like the waterfall you speak of. . .

[Gandré]

Oh! How I adore this... my gosh, where have you been? Pure beauty, I have the German expression on my tongue: br�hwarmer �berzug, ein kuscheliges Nest, von der Liebe eingeh�mmert. Means something like hot glazing, cosy nest, drummed into them by love. stunning, your talent is immense. thanks a lot for reviewing Beyong language, I just came home, dearest. love.

[Touché Armada]

mmm beautiful gush, no dams here Nan, none at all.
Just lovely... And now tha my body has automaticaly switched to 5 am wake ups.... I think I'm going to attend a few morning meditations.. I might borrow a few lines from you string them together in my mind as my mantra.. Thank you.

[Sel Whiteley]

This is truly stunning, I love the merging of your own passion and her immediacy. The

she implodes as a waterfall
turned inside out, all it took was the same
lone longing that pervades all senses

There is such beauty in these lines, you really capture here. I love the flow and the sonics within this, its so sensual and sensitive. I will add more later, in work.

I like the entire message here. It is very powerful and insightful.

It is hard for me to say anything else, as I am left speechless.

Good form, great choice of words, well painted imagery. great insight and message.

A wonderful piece.

[Michael X]

Nan, you have a great way with flow- this piece is delved in insight and reveals the details of inspiration,
the opening sentence immediately draws the mind to contemplation, "to romance the muse"..Nice.

reflect the nature of being, to implode - vs. explode, shows just hows this excellent poem is written
outside of the box, and keeps the readers thoughts drawn toward the metaphorical aspect in relation

to the meaning, to express with certain subtlety, the goal of ambition, I really enjoyed reading this.
Thanks, Mike