End

End

A Poem by nakerjay

I promise you an end,

If you take my hand,

I'll lead you through this door,

Away from the neverending war,

That rages in your head,

Threatens to leave you dead,

You could cry to GOD for help,

But decide to do it yourself,

With one to the head its done,

Peace at last...or has Hell just begun?

© 2010 nakerjay


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Great write. On the tragic side but good. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

Posted 16 Years Ago


OK, now your writing is still good, you still have that flow and rhyme and you did another good job with very few words which is good, I really would like to see you try writing about something positive though. You are beginning to worry me! Though death is a sure thing in this thing we call life and in general fairly easy to write about, put yourself out there a bit more and try something more postive and maybe a bit longer, I know you can do it, you have the talent. Now REMEMBER this is ONLY my opinion and I do not claim to be a writer, I just know what I like. Keep going my friend, you are getting better and better. ;)

Posted 16 Years Ago



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Added on July 4, 2008
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