A Setting Sun

I am so tired of driving towards a setting sun

I never get any closer to the horizon 

I am greasy and tired 

Outrunning a hungry nightfall 

I am trying, I swear, I am 

But I only have so much to burn

It's been a lifetime 

Of twitching eyes and and baked gasoline

Sleep sounds nice 

On evenings like these 

Reviews

[Soren]

I love the beginning of this point. It makes a simple statement that is obviously true enigmatic chasing the sun, and never getting closer to the horizon poetic

[nadia dmitri]

Thank you Soren, that was my intent :)

[emmajoygreen]

Am wondering if you're talking about The Sun - Light? Perhaps, instead, are you searching for clarity rather living in a fog, lost, trying to feel your way in life.. in the present time? Tense words

[nadia dmitri]

Yes, the feeling of pursuing the light/happiness/peace but still feeling chased by the fog. Thank you for your visit Emma!

[emmajoygreen]

Maybe it's a case of light and dark - needing the one to appreciate the other? Will tell you a funny. Long ago, children with parents, holidaying in the English countryside not far from the sea: went to a very small rodeo. Vistors parked their cars forward to look into a roped off area. As they sat there, a sea mist slowly slowly moved slid its way towards the area BUT by the time it was all meant to srart the mist was as thick as a blanket! We only hear the sound of hooves boucing around and a loudspeaker announcing apologies for the invisibilty! The oddest thing was all the cars and their contents continued to stare into the mist!!! We, yes, honestly - this is true, we did. We and others could hear each other in hysterics looking into nothing..we hadnt paid, (collection tin or cap would have been handed round after the goings on. But we all applauded and then - were invited to go to a pub not far away! Probably to buy the organisers a drink! I was ten or so.. is over thirty years.. still remember how we ached for laughing!

[Soren]

A truely greatpoem It starts with some wonderful lines that are so relatable and like any perfect lines metaphors that melt into reality. Wonderfully said.

[nadia dmitri]

Thank you so much Soren, I appreciate your visits dearly

[schlanks]

I'm truly impressed. The exhaustion is saturated throughout. Outrunning a hungry nightfall is an amazing line. And the way it lands with the last two lines really makes you want the best for this restless driver.

[nadia dmitri]

Thank you so much :) I always appreciate your reviews

[Green]

A new take on something that usually gets talked about only for its beauty. Not that a sunset is any less beautiful, even constantly trying to catch a beautiful thing and never getting any closer is no less exhausting. You can feel the weariness and yet hints of the ongoing fight in these words.

[nadia dmitri]

Thank you so much for your kind words :)

[MsJewel]

Very well writtenn with so many great lines. I enjoyed your poem very much. :) Julie

[nadia dmitri]

Thank you very much!

[John the Baptist]

Has the sound of weariness, this one. There is the sense of willingness to let go, to embrace the one great darkness.

[nadia dmitri]

That is what I was going for, thank you for your review :)

[Vol]

Nadia,
Ah, sleep! I cannot remember the last time i knew someone who was not living your poem. EVEERYONE is tired. I think I might go a little further and say, we are all insane! There are studies that say I'm right. The last one hundred-fifty or so years, mankind got off his feet and sat down in steel, we've turned into a demolition derby. We are so sensory overloaded, we may never recover. and the way things are going, we may not even get the chance.
Vol

[nadia dmitri]

Thats interesting to hear, thank you for sharing your thoughts!

[Davidgeo]

The sun doesn't exist for us to reach it, that's crazy. The purpose is in effort, "ultimate" goals are complete fan fiction over the millennia... actually getting there means you're dead. But unlike us, the sun will rise again.

That's just some stoners opinion, I like your poem and what it made me opine but I understand that I'm probably misunderstanding this. It was good time regardless.

[nadia dmitri]

I appreciate your perspective, its interesting to hear different interpretations. I was intending more as a symbol for the healing process, and that feeling of constantly sprinting away from relapse. But viewing in terms of ambition is also an interesting angle. Thank you for the visit!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

these images are wonderful..."hungry nightfall" and "baked gasoline"---
this poem ignites feelings I have had over and over again.
j.

[nadia dmitri]

I appreciate your review very much, thank you :)