Faithless Water

Sponge off his sins

In a tub of faithless water

Because being a wife

Is just like being a daughter

Reviews

[Urza's Severed Head]

This gives me huge Emily Dickinson vibes (in the best way possible). You say so much with so little, and there's so much depth that I can't just read the poem, I have to stop and ruminate on it. You did an incredible Job!

[nadia dmitri]

Thank you so much! That is very kind :))

[Soren]

So deep are these faithless waters. The metaphor can go as deep as the sea itself or remain on the surface of the sponge itself. So short yet so vast. The relationship of wife and daughter and the cleaning of sins implies the inequity in husband wife relationship. A wife treated as a daughter in the relationship is hopefully a thing of the past. The rhyme is great in this poem as well don't let its length fool the reader of its power.

[nadia dmitri]

That's exactly what I was going for, the role of women to clean up after men, whether they are a daughter or a wife. Thank you for your interpretations and compliments :))

[jaye river]

man....i love this so much

[nadia dmitri]

Thank you :))

[Kelly Scheppers]

Great power and artistry can be found in brevity. It is a forte I pursue. Lovely name, Nadia. Pleased to meet you!

[nadia dmitri]

Thank you kindly!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there is major sin here...and his water is definitely polluted, like his heart.
Powerful four lines...
your brevity always packs a punch.
I enjoy your work so much.
j.

[nadia dmitri]

Thank you so so much Jacob, that means a lot :)