you are the boss

just wrote it on a rainy day!!

We all wish to be happily ever after

A life full of joy and laughter

And beautiful plants to water

And maybe a smart daughter

But one day you’ll have enough of always being everyone’s joy maker machine

Sometimes you should act like an angry human being

So they’ll know that it will not be okay

And a hug won’t make my day

There’s too much stress that has been absorbed

And the price no one will be able to afford

But you know what,

Just look high in the sky

And try to not cry

Because it’s nothing but a loss

Let them know that you are the boss.

Author's Note

please give me your true opinion!!

Reviews

[Gerald Parker]

Change the first line: We all wish to be happily ever after > 'We all wish to be happy ever after' or 'We all wish to live happily ever after.' Maybe try not to rhyme. Also - I've offered this advice before - avoid abstract writing and use imagery. Sorry.

[Brave girl]

okey message received!

[khalid]

from structure to words picking and images drawn with such a mixture of feelings, i have really enjoyed reading this nice piece..

[Brave girl]

thank you,i'm glad you like it!

[Keith LaFountaine]

A very compelling read. You certainly write with a lot of conviction and emotion. I like how it's very uplifting, even though the subject matter is semi-dark. Good work!

[Brave girl]

thank you so much,glad you like it1

[s y e]

It's was a really good, well written, write. Like Sarah said, we can't always make people happy but we can try. We always try to make the people we love happy, I know I do and my boyfriend does, and I know that many people on here do to but I guess it can be hard to always make them happy. Especially if you aren't there with them and the only thing you can do is call them. It's hard because you want to be there but at the end of the day, if they feel better and they're happier then it makes you happier.... Right?

I liked this, really well done.

[Brave girl]

thanks for your review and i agree with u somehow!

[Teddy Westley Graham]

Hmm... I think some of the lines are too long to fit the poem. They should be broken up a little. maybe .... I dunno. But I did like it.

[Brave girl]

thank u so much for your remarque

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

"...always being everyone's joy maker machine"--lol LOVE this line, because I can totally relate to it. We must always remember that we can't make everyone happy all the time, only some of the people happy some of the time. Well done.

[Brave girl]

thank you for your lovely review,and we sure can't make people happy and let ourselves down and actually fake our smile

[Sami Khalil]

"But one day you’ll have enough of always being everyone’s joy maker machine."
A very good poem that raises good questions . It is all different approaches to things of life so whatever you think it will work the best...Merci Boucou...:)

[Brave girl]

thanks for the review dear writer!

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. Any time...:)

[Brave girl]

lol i know that! =D

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)