Drowning

everyone needs a moment to be all alone!

Behind the smile are unshed tears

Beneath the hope are untold fears

Her heart is filled with unspoken greif

In wich there is no way to find relief

 

The rain drowns the screams she yell

Cursing all those she loathes to hell

As she walks with a heavy heart all around

Nothing in her life keeps her bound

 

She has nothing left to give

Nothing more to live

She’s tired of it all

Of being everyone’s doll.

 

She’s been pushed too far

And kept her emotions bottled in a jar

Far too long for her sanity

She needs to let it go

 

No one will she miss

As peace finds her soul

And fills in the missing hole.  

Author's Note

i hope you'll like it :)

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

I feel you in this-I maybe wrong but this is my take
you are always being pushed in a way that you do not like
be this, be that ,do this, do that, but it may not be what you want out of life
emotions bottled in a jar-can kill a soul
I do not mean in a don't drink and drive kind of way-I mean in a you will be this in life kind of way,this is what we expect and we will take nothing less-your feelings do not count kind of way
you have expressed yourself well in this piece
thank you for sharing

[Brave girl]

thanks for this great review and i think that what i've expressed in this peom was a long time ago,i got my freedom and i'm free mentaly they're not in my head anymore :)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Excellent read and write. One wants to save her from this moment of hopelessness.

[Brave girl]

i'm glad you liked it!

[Salar Majak]

this is beautiful!
i love how you show us the struggle your character is going through, how she can take no more, how she will not look behind,

(The rain drowns the screams she yell
Cursing all those she loathes to hell
As she walks with a heavy heart all around
Nothing in her life keeps her bound)

that's my favorite part and plus the ending was beautiful
great job

[Buddhistboy73]

I did like it yes, aside from some slightly "bumpy" lines....it's in the depths of emotions such as these that we writers pen our finest lines. You take the reader on a journey here, allowing them in to see what is inside your heart....the best kind of poems for me.

"She's been pushed too far, And kept her emotions in a jar".....my favourite lines...:)

Love, light and laughter to you my friend....:) these emotions always end....:)
BB

[Mariam]

While reading I think of myself, nicely done :)

[Brave girl]

thanks,perhaps it was talking about you :)

[Sami Khalil]

She has nothing left to give

Nothing more to live

She’s tired of it all

Of being everyone’s doll.
My favorite in this well written poem...:)

[Brave girl]

thank you for reading :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. Any time. A good job on this one but all are good...:)

[Brave girl]

i'm glad you like it =D

[Sami Khalil]

As much as I like all Morocco and especially Casablanca. It is a famous city in America because of the movie : " Casablanca " you should be proud...:)

[Brave girl]

what movie?

[Sami Khalil]

It is called : Casablanca

[Brave girl]

Yea i guess i do know it :)

[Sami Khalil]

A very famous movie in America.

[Brave girl]

cool :)

[Sami Khalil]

:):):):):):)