Despair

The room is so lively, yet appears so bleak

and sounds of laughter and joy go unnoticed,

a smile proves challenging and unfocused

on the count of gloom knotting the mind so weak 

The most passionate endeavors seem a bore

euphoria is forced and all but real

and the negativity difficult to ignore.

Reviews

[Prince Ashlityr]

fun little black and white

[julespinkyd]

I'm sorry but this reminds me of this place. Not to be mean or whatever but when I read reviews and stuff it feels insincere and just real fake. And I'm not speaking about this work here.
The ones that speak with that passion I see them being ignored, comments written are empty. I try to look past and interpret the best I can as point of views are as vast as the ocean. I liked this one cause it reminds me of how I feel when i read some comments in this place you know just hollow and just void. But whatever you were going for you caught it for me and me and me alone.

[Derek Cummings]

Interpret as you will. For that is the beauty I see in writing and reading poetry. Thanks for stopping by!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Well said. This captures the way that the surroundings have little effect on us when we are caught in that gloom of which you speak. It is a terrible state to feel.

[Derek Cummings]

Thanks for the comment! Much appreciated.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

You're welcome.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Such a true and well expressed poem. Lovely choice of words and I (as well as many others) can truly relate. You've pained a picture of true dispair with only 7 lines. Very very well done! I loved it.
God Bless:)

[Derek Cummings]

Thanks for the kind words:)

[Lost in Wonderland]

No problem at all:)

[Samuel Dickens]

I think I might understand this, having been a square peg my entire life. Very good writing.

[Derek Cummings]

Sorry this is late, I'm still getting a hang of how writers cafe works:). I'm not sure what a square peg is, but glad you found some connection in the poem. Thank you.

[Starrbitt]

Creative, deep. Written well, Loved it.

[Derek Cummings]

Thank you!