Addy

Just problems with my life ...

 

This Orange Pill

 

Everything I am,

Everything I am not,

Takes me up

Tears me down,

Makes me a prince,

Strips me of my crown,

 

The little orange pill,

How sweet it is,

The reason for my success,

Is nothing more than a life’s temptress.

 

The w***e she is,

Selling herself;

Twenties for five.

As they come around knocking,

And their hearts never there.

 

The little slit on her back,

Like the slit on my wrist,

She marks where she has been,

And the love she has stolen from me.

Ten years gone,

My heart to ashes

Author's Note

Please ignore grammer

Reviews

[Megan]

I've felt this and been through this..it has seriously touched home and I admire how well you versed it.
It's so intimate and you really give a piece of yourself up here.
This is something I'm going to read on my darkest days because it will be a good reminder that i'm not the only one feeling that way.
Bravo, I admire you're bravery for expressing this part of your life.

[Danielle Asher]

depressing.Not that there is anything wrong with that.
I like how it starts off a lot. Everything i am, everything I'm not.

[Steve Thompson]

Everything I am,
Everything I am not,
Takes me up
Tears me down,
Makes me a prince,
Strips me of my crown...well done stanza

[Collette]

Haven't we all been here before? Burnt out on the only thing that makes you feel the fire of life...well, maybe not everyone...But I feel ya man. I feel this.

[Kiddo]

I really like this one. I love how you've shown the give and take of your relationship with "Addy".

"The little slit on her back/ Like the slit on my wrist/ She marks where she has been / And the love she has stolen from me."

Beautiful. You can tell she's really taken a lot out of you.