For Dad.

One day I hope you can tell God,

"You gave the son I wished for me."

I just hope deep down you know, 

you're the only sun I wish to be.

That one night when I was 9, 

I wonder if you remember

It was bad enough if was cold,

If I can recall some time in December

You got that bad call from school,

my teacher was worried about my grades

Deep down I knew I could have done better,

because all your life you've given an "A"

Countless nights I'd peek through my door,

funny how you thought I was asleep

It was a rare time of the day,

the only time you showed you're weak

You would sit down on the living room sofa,

planting your face in your hands

Wondering how much more of God's testing,

you could possibly withstand.

Just remember no man can degrade your love,

or undermine your efforts

Because you stood your troop up on its feet,

even though you were under pressure

It was because of this I kept my head up,

I've always wanted you to be proud of me

You promised your friends I'll be a protégé,

but I'm trying to be a prodigy.

Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

Any man who loves his father deserves my respect well done

[Muhammad]

Thank you, Tate.

I am sure you are a great father, and grandfather.

[Neg]

Amazing poem, It hit home for me. Keep up the good work. It is definitely not going unnoticed. Love the last two lines.

[Muhammad]

I appreciated anyone who even read this poem, really.

It's funny because in no way had I intended this to actually win in this contest..it was a piece which was the result of a rough night, and I just wanted it to be read honestly. Thanks so much and I look forward to sharing more!

[Adelia Alighieri]

I completely agree wish Serah. You've used some fascinating phrases to go with your piece and it creates a wonderful effect. Brrrilliant.

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. ah, that's just the most beautiful and the sweetest poem ever written for a dad ... he has to be proud of you ... for knowing him ... for seeing him ... and for wanting to make him so proud ... amazingly ravishing poetry ...