The Ledge

Thank you for reading :)

Here, on this ledge

above all the dead,

and all the broken therewithal,

the masses push, but I shout

I choose not to fall,

nor descend to my death, 

to end it all.

To stop all the pain, 

to kill all regret,

they walk off the edge,

they blindly relent.

Here, on this ledge

above all the dead,

and all the broken therewithal,

the masses push, but I shout

I choose not to fall,

nor descend to my death, 

to end it all.

To stop all the pain, 

to kill all regret,

they walk off the edge,

they blindly relent.

They push, but I shout

I choose not to fall,

nor descend to my death, 

and then try to crawl 

through a sea of dead bodies.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the constant barrage of protests, do they have the desired effect. Only over the long haul will we see.
the repetition of stanzas drive home the theme.
My one suggestion would be that when you post poems, rather than give a description that tells what the poem is about...allow your reader to relate in his or her own way to the write. It is like being told the ending of a movie before we see it.
j.

[James Paranormal]

Hey j, I really appreciate the reading, and clear understanding and insight :) And, thank you for the great suggestion, that is great to know, I will fix that right now :))

[Betty Hermelee]

You certainly did not follow the crowd, you stood your ground, even through pain, but you would not give in to death as the others did.... then you found yourself among those that maybe were cowards....
i like the repetition of the phrases, it hammers it into your psyche.
Nice work!
Best, B

[InkAndScrolls]

Wow. This has helped me in so many ways. I refuse to let myself descend. Thank you for posting.

[Dave]

I get the feeling that he finds himself stronger than those that plunge aimlessly into the abyss. He knows that he is better for thinking and doing for himself. The pain he suffers is endurable and does not need to be ended by taking that final leap off the ledge.
Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

There is an inner resilience here of a person who has a strong mind and won't give in easily. Nicely expressed.

Chris

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I think this poem can have several explanations and meaning. What is come into my head. Playing computer game The silent hill on some strong hallucinogen . I guess i am wrong. But those scary nurses still haunting me.

[moog-drika]

Okay this is very dark but I see a little ray of positivity making it crawl through a sea of that darkness. When ambient around keeps pushing you to fall, I need this kind of strength to fight back rather than inclining to death. The repetition works great as a medicine to make someone understand that they should not give up.

Indeed a great write!

[Dave Brown]

I never see the deep meaning and take all quite literally
What this reminds me of is all the flat earthers falling off the edge of the planet.
If the fall didn't kill ya, the sorry scent just might
But, a fairly radical way to get rid of regret!

[James Paranormal]

Lol! That is perfect, because it is good to know how readers think, it really is, as I am such a newbie that I never even thought about it like that, as if to approach a poem from the reader's perspective, thank you for that. And, flat Earth. That truly reminds me of flat earthers too, it definitely could be because I did watch a ton of flat Earth debunk videos, and the mind works in mysterious ways lol

[Neville]

now aint that just the way it happens sometimes... it is most reassuring though to see that others are aware and .. hey you probably wont ever know what that means to another person quite the way it feels to someone else .. because my psychosis is my psychosis and I aint gonna share it with a whole bloomin Cafe now am I.....

An intriguing poem sir and compelling write from the off...