Bright Lit Were The Eyes Of Yours

Sort of just venting, ignore if you want.

Was that love real?

Sharpening our ability to feel

A dagger of lush

A stone of lust

Suppose it wasn’t enough

Barrier was too tough

Still hear the plea

Echoing from distraught

Bright lit were the eyes of yours

A gaze piercing silver

Such passion of heart

Killed from the start

A hollow hole gapes

But it was fate

Reminisce that passion

Fits like your fashion

Buried deep are those days

The crave never fades

Now the itch be soothed

Remembering you

Once was great,

Always too late

The question attacks

Will you remember me?

Author's Note

This is a new one, wrote it last night.

Reviews

[CreativeStroke]

Wow, this piece had such an outstanding beat to it! It just flowed perfectly as I read along. I could almost here a subtle drum beat as I was going through each line. Loved it!

The message and emotion behind it was well expressed too. I could sense the feeling behind each word penned, which is always a good thing to give to your readers in the works of art you create. Well done Alexander!

[Alexander Rodgers]

Wow, thanks a bunch! Ah yes, I like to strive upon emotion when I write; i'm glad you could pick that out :)

[chaotic katie]

Beautifully written! Amazing word flow and imagery. I also loved the emotion that can be felt in this peice, it speaks to people. Fantastic job, once again! complete 100% :)

[Alexander Rodgers]

Wow thanks Katie! I appreciate it. I try to incorporate my own ''voice'' in my writing, I guess I succeeded lol.

[chaotic katie]

yes, yes you did. :)

[Silhouette]

Wow...very heartfelt and relatable. Beautiful word flow, thank you so much for penning.

[Alexander Rodgers]

Thank you :). You're welcome, this one just flew out of me one night, couldn't get the words out of my head

[Silhouette]

Ah I see...it's great when that happens lol. You're welcome =)