Angel

A melodramatic poem for a girl I used to love

One of God's finest creations

That hushed the winds and calmed the oceans

You healed my wounds and lacerations

and made me whole again

 You brought me to a quiet place

An Angel and I sat face-to-face

I felt the warmth of your embrace

and I felt love again

 We were, for then, without complication

I, your inamorato, you, my fascination

'Hurrah' for loneliness eradication

and we were 'us' back then

 I felt, in mid-winter, you begin to pull away

The rope I clutched began to rip and fray

Whatever you felt for me had gone astray

and I couldn't find it again

 I brought you to a crowded place

An Angel and I stood face-to-face

I was stung by ineloquent grace

and I was alone again

Author's Note

I'm not sure how to spell 'inamorato' so please don't mock me

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

The words of your poem are complex and the lines full of substance. Yet it speaks of a basic happening between two people in human nature. One may perceive another as the ultimate in beauty, an idealized angel, only to later discover the pain and angst of a failed relationship. A side note: Angels, as actually depicted in the Bible, are powerful spirit creatures always depicted as men. One angel killed 185,000 enemies in one night! But, traditional Christendom usually shows angels to be effeminate images of beauty. Go figure. Back to your poem. Your imagination has produced vivid images and intense emotions. Nicely done.

[TheMostSplendiferous]

This was great! I love your rhyme scheme. The only slight issue I had was that "oceans" doesn't really rhyme with the other words. But that's not a big deal. Well done!

[BLACK PRINCE]

I can tell that, like me, you too write from the heart and soul.
I feel a certain melancholy to your writing that I reviewed so far.

This is a very beautiful powerful poem.

I love the refrain with the word 'again'.


KEEP IT REAL

WELL DONE!!!