peanut butter and jelly

i want real criticism on structure , words do mean something but looking for style points first

Green light stop, Red light go, Green light go, Red light stops.
I just want to say give me signs that say nothing
blow up beds and feather pillows,
fold out cots with 500 count sheets,
silicon tits at a kidnapping conventions,
boy scout patches covering nuclear creation,
handle bar mustaches dusting lesbians panties,
def mutes writing speeches for the new nominee,
stay there, stay there, no where else to go, stay there,
a moment, a thought, a dream, a uncompromisable thing,
pea-knuckle with my granddads memory, finding free electricity,
words mean nothing,everything is something, this is just backwards 7.


 

Reviews

[EyeM_E]

This is awesomely creative !!! Free thought is often taken for granted but not by u. The ending is classic and very clever !!!

[CookieMonster♥&h..]

this is cool:)

[Brad]

this is a rant, i do like the construction of this peice, it fits with the style of how it's told, or at least how i hear it in my head (which can be a scary place)

[HopelesslyDevoted]

very unique