Senseless Senses

Look At Me D****t, At What You Have Done
Look At Your Creation, What I Have Become

Taste The Thickness Of Loathing In The Air
Taste What You Think And Know Is Despair 

Listen To The Beat Of A Dieing Heart
Listen To The Agony As My Soul Departs
 
Smell The Potent Aroma Of Decay In Feelings
Smell The Stench Of Hate Filling Your Surroundings

Feel My Skin As It Calluses And Cold ens
Feel The Blood Thicken And Hopelessness Molten

Sense All That Has Become Of Your Senselessness
Since You Have No Feeling Of Your Own  

Reviews

[V.B.]

Definitely dark, and powerful. One is pretty much compelled to finish it after that first line. Well done on involving every single sense--you really make the brain work to keep up. On an unrelated note, is there a significance to the capitalization?

My one criticism would be with "Feel me skin as it calluses and coldens." While I accept poetic license as an excuse to invent words, I think the rest of this is evidence that you could probably do better than "coldens."

[Michael Morris]

I capitalized the first letter in every word not because of any real significant emphasis on the words, just trying out different styles, try to use different presentations on all my writings

[Brad]

dripping with resentment...loved it

[HopelesslyDevoted]

very thought provoking and attention grabbing

[iamkim]

aweeee! this is simply amazing! a very nice write.
these are my favorite lines:
"Look At Me D****t, At What You Have Done
Look At Your Creation, What I Have Become"

...very powerful first 2 lines for a great poem! keep em up!