Arike climbed the cliff

Arike climbed the cliff

A Story by Cate Mcgowan

     I allow my mid-length, straight hair to curve around my ear by my finger tip. Caressing that little space where the roots meet the skin with a loose hang nail. It sends chills along my arms and my neck jolts back shivering. It isn't even cold out but i have never felt more frozen in my life. The trees this time of year are only so faded because it isn't necessarily spring but still very close, they are a sheer coffee color with murky autumn leaves. Still the most beautiful thing is the parks. Feet dragging through the wreckage of what were once leaves and twigs i stare back at him, just standing behind me. Unaware of my thoughts, or what my next action will be. " come on, your so slow" i speed up a bit until i see a hint of water and the ripped piece of furniture that has taken its ground. "How horrible would it be to have lost your virginity on that couch?" i think not saying out loud. He follows behind me and then approaches me from behind. Should i kiss him? Is this even the time? We have kissed, or rather "hooked up" almost a million times before but not once did i question if we were both putting thought into this. Was he thinking about my lips like i was his? Why would he be? He doesn't entice me nor speak me fair he just stands behind me in an empty gaze and hugs me. The greatest hugs are always at times like this when we are alone in the park and no one in the world can see us. Its times like those that i appreciate in the most extent. Without thought, which is typical, i allow his tongue to catch my own. For a moment, and then a few. It feels as always nothing new or different, just good. Safe. I like the way it feels and at the same time know it will never really be enough. Because it doesn't stop at kissing and there are other things he wants to do. Is he worth that to me though? I don't want to think about it right now. My hair falls nearly tangling itself in my earring and stumbles in my eyes. Brown like the trees but darker, more seemingly twisted but at the same time subtle and tame. I liked it this way.

© 2012 Cate Mcgowan


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18 views omg who has viewed this and WHO KNOWS WHAT IT'S ABOUT I DON'T

Anyway this would have to be one of my favourites of your writing, not because it is about my experiences but because of the simple yet spectacular descriptions that truly capture the emotions. Example, "My hair falls nearly tangling itself in my earring and stumbles in my eyes. Brown like the trees but darker, more seemingly twisted but at the same time subtle and tame. I liked it this way." Such a simple little sentence, but I can recall this happening! I love this a lot, so I decided to review it. It is short, but the perfect length. I LOVE THIS A LOT OKAY!

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a Gripping write, It keeps you on the edge of your seatand I am like KISS HIM LOL Great write, might try to paragraph it though

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Cate Mcgowan

12 Years Ago

i was just thinking it could use a bit of cleaning up, thank you so much!! ~ Cate
18 views omg who has viewed this and WHO KNOWS WHAT IT'S ABOUT I DON'T

Anyway this would have to be one of my favourites of your writing, not because it is about my experiences but because of the simple yet spectacular descriptions that truly capture the emotions. Example, "My hair falls nearly tangling itself in my earring and stumbles in my eyes. Brown like the trees but darker, more seemingly twisted but at the same time subtle and tame. I liked it this way." Such a simple little sentence, but I can recall this happening! I love this a lot, so I decided to review it. It is short, but the perfect length. I LOVE THIS A LOT OKAY!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on September 2, 2012
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Cate Mcgowan
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Hi. I'm Cate. I am a writer under construction, i would love any type of criticism. I am also young, hyper and strange so i worn you that some of my writing may be "silly" or "high-strung".I advise yo.. more..

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