Lack of Empathy

Interpret on your own. This is a little rhyming and silly but that shouldn't take away from the fact that it is a serious poem. Also i'm fourteen so please consider that this is HIGHLY exaggerated.

Maybe just "how are you?" would do

To get her up and help her through.

To mend the battle wounds he left 

No ounce spared of theft

A constant disguise

Praying some one might realize

Her attempt to compromise with what she had been made to heft. 

Her own burden continued in growth

To receive in return jealous loathe

He still had her on a string

To belittle and play with 

Amusing the imitation kith 

She reaches out for frith but still relies on pain he'll bring.

She was a beautiful painting on display

But no one could see 

The vicious visions of a painter gone astray

And what he had brought her to be. 

Author's Note

CRITICISM IS LIKE MY FAVORITE THING, I'M BEGGING FOR IT.

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

These words, to me, represent the life of a beautiful swan who is scooped up by high society's love and then tossed back and forth from one salon to another and onto numerous hair dressers, until when she wakes up one day, she realizes... I'm no longer who I wanted to be... I don't know who I am...
Where in the movies... this is where the swan jumps the next bus for a new life... in reality, the swan often stays trapped in the prison.
You have brought to us one of lifes little ugly realities. Your words give it life and make us wonder how and why and what can we do.

Thanks for your ink!
Aaron

[Cate Mcgowan]

i really like the pictures you paint in your descriptions. thank you again for a lovely review.

[Jordan's Back]

Some people have the compassion of rattlesnakes. your Poem is dead on and your structure is amazing. Awesome write

[Cate Mcgowan]

compassion of rattlesnakes thats insanely quotable. thank you!~ Cate

[Jordan's Back]

Your welcome :P

[Sami Khalil]

To get her up and help her through.
To mend the battle wounds he left ...
Simply beautiful too...

[Cate Mcgowan]

thank you so much, i agree. ~ Cate

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome... :)

[Mauricio Montoya]

This piece made me think of the Cat and Mouse game,which that in it self can be cruel,
Nice work.

[Cate Mcgowan]

I also viewed this as a game of cat and mouse, i am so glad you could see my vision. Yes, it can indeed be cruel. Thank you again for your review! ~ Cate