Pain: A Stars Point of View

Reviews

[jdr / Jennifer]

Beautiful, brilliant, creative- love your work. Thank you for posting this piece.

[Jane Stones]

This is awesome!! Don't think I'll ever look up at the stars the same again in my despair. Makes me think how often we look to people during heartbreak and they are thinking the same...burnt out years ago

[Coyote Poetry]

The words strong and a lot of hidden story and places. I had to re-read a few times.
"Years away, but somehow I manage to hear your screams,
calling out from an empty gaze."
The stage of empty gaze leave us with questions we cannot answer. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Gabriel's Last Breath (band)]

Thank u so much for your reviews. Much appreciated

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[AmySolt]

I really like this. I have never thought of the star's perspective. Nice.

[fattycbreezy52]

Wow...a star's point of view.I love stars.So I'm glad it's kinda personified here.You should tune these lyrics most definitely.It would work wonders.PLus,it sounds tragic.Such helplessness .It's fantastic,yet hard-hitting:)

[Gabriel's Last Breath (band)]

thank you very much 52, i think i have a video somewhere of it complete with music and words, ill search for it tomorrow and try to post a link if you like. i wrote it while in north carolina. stars are amazing, and sad at the same time. depends on the day i suppose

[fattycbreezy52]

Yes surely,I would love to see that:)And 52.........haha!You do make me laugh.Not bad!;)

[~]

Are these lyrics too? A sad write. The only ones witnessing were the ones that couldn't help. ..
Well done :)

[Gabriel's Last Breath (band)]

It is actually lol. The star is talking. Imagine a person, hysterical, running out and dropping onto their knees in the middle of an open field and looking up to the sky, as if the sky can help them. The star sees it as a cry for him to help. Like--take the subject away from the pain, but that would mean the impossible. Too far to make it in time. Before she "burns out" as well. which is where the "taste the grave" phrase comes in. Maybe she is on the verge of dying from a broken heart. I don't know. i had a lot of different scenarios so i left it to interpretation-ish. Im a songwriter/vocalist so most of my stuff is simply a song. But! or to be fancy, Alas! I'll post a poem or story or something eventually. I have like 4 of them, but i used my potty mouth for them and now---ashamed, but demotivated to do anything about it. Someone will enjoy the tainted word list.

[~]

Now I can see all that. The agony and the life snuffed out.
Lyrics are poems too. :) it's amazing that you can add music to them.
Keep it up :)