The Beast Of LIfe

A poem I wrote when I was feeling, just, down on life.

I will stay here and never leave,

These icy clear waters, and

Beauty so deep

The name of this place,            

Has no importance at all,

But in this place there’s,

No pain, no anger, no disappointment

Yes, I very much like it here,

I don’t think I’ll ever leave,

Because leaving this depth of slumber,

Will only release the beast

The beast of life is angry,

He hunts, hurts, and kills,

I know I’m not in his grasp,

Because I have the savior

I know I must now wake,

And face the endless day,

Where temptation awaits my way

I understand that life is hurtful, but

Know I know that without it,

The hurt wouldn’t be as wonderful as it is

Not one bit, not at all

 

Author's Note

Please don't be to brutal. This is sort of a diary poem, and I just want to know how it makes you feel when you read it. Thanks!!!

Reviews

[Wunderlich]

I really liked this. Every bit of it is awesome. Great word choice. Very nice poem.

[Sarah Hawkinson]

I love this poem. It depicts a very moving emotion that is so hard to put into words but I think you've done a great job at that!

[Hello Kitty]

I think you did a wonderful job! It is a sad poem, but also can be very true. It is very well written... is it your first poem? You selected fitting metaphors, and your meter is on a good beat for the subject it is talking about. =)

[A.M.P.]

hey there. =) I really like this poem. It feels like it's a piece of your heart that you put into words. I love the message you're sending....when times are tough, there is a bit of hope to pull you along. Great job!

[BABSIE BEE]

Welcome first of all Olivia. I think this write is so true and you have put it together magically, making it sound almost terrifying to waken yet exciting. Well done you !!