rain

I dont know about this one. I was listening to beats on youtube and this just started poring in my mind, so i decided to write it down. It doesnt quite fit together to me so tell me what ya'll think.

I look in the sky

Staring at the stars

Wishing I could fly

Away

Away from all the pain

Away from the rain

Caused by the tears

That we all touch gods fears

We as a society of peers

All for one and one another

A child without a mother

Stands there crying

Trying

To find its way in the world

Trying to finds it way

To him the the world ending on that day

The day god took his meaning

His life

 his feeling

he tried to say sorry

he tried to take it back

whats done is done

you cant help it

you just got to fight it

look up again

notice anything different

nothing nota

the world doesn’t change

cant change

the feeling is strange

it will soon be over

just move to cover

the rain will stop

the rain will fade

Author's Note

I dont know about this one. I was listening to beats on youtube and this just started poring in my mind, so i decided to write it down. It doesnt quite fit together to me so tell me what ya'll think.

Reviews

[Yuki Thoj]

Personally, I think it did match quite well. Even though it was to beats you found, I think the words match the meaning you were trying to give it. I think both the words and meaning coincide hand in hand.

[Jake Murphy]

Thanks, glad you liked it

[Elizabeth]

This is a song, Jake. I felt it before I saw your note. It just needs some glue to hold it together :) I'm not a musician, so I'm not the one to offer advice on this piece- but I sure do like where it's going.

[Jake Murphy]

some people see meaning within it..some people see just words..I see words with meaning..but hey i wrote it. thanks for the review it means alot that you took the time to read it