Relize

As you think of your heart
The beating and the pulsing part
The rushing sounds
Of the blood circulating
As you leap and bound
Waiting and intispating
The return
Of the one
And you feel the burn
For the person you know as the sun
The one reason for life
The one reason for living
You know it's your right
Your clinging
To
True Feelings
And there Endings
And now know it's just YOU

 

Author's Note

This is my first Attempt at poetry..please comment but dont crush me.(lol)

Reviews

[Yuki Thoj]

It was a nice attempt at poetry, and you did pretty good for a first attempt. The imagery was there, and you could vividly see what was going on. I like the messaged you were conveying in this poem as well. Continue writing poetry and you never know, you could get better at it. ^_^

[Jake Murphy]

thanks alot for your thoughts it means alot