Symphony declines

A critique by a former participant is naive

 

All the sleepless nights

All that could have been and all that might

Set alight reality to confirmation

Dribbling past feelings and temptation

Making you wish past actions, you would vomit

Making you see the sins you were about to commit

And deduction and logic is erased about

And feelings and emotions are phased out

You then start to think, blink and sink

Tomorrow you then drink and still think

You then look at a bottle of wine

And appreciate that a symphony can decline

 

And back then you thought eloquence you would cap

But now, but now you know it was a trap

And you ponder and realise

What point fate had to emphasise

And you stare at your jargon

And you throw yourself into death’s wagon

Believing in yourself, in angels you shun

And of life you buy yourself a gun

And of a love that was, you are capable to kill

And of metaphors you feel ill

And all the thoughts you render them divine

And appreciate that a symphony can decline

 

And you say there was once a Kudzai

And you shall say there was once a Tendai

Within dreams you look at their faults

And think they brought yours to a halt

And you start to appreciate you are above them

You then know your feelings were a shame

You then ask yourself why you were jealous

You then curse yourself for being zealous

And now you say good riddance

And now you are glad to be at a distance

You now thank fate that she is not mine

And bellow out a symphony can decline

The past, and the past you elude

And the future, the future you conclude

And your soul starts to shine

And you are happy that the symphony did decline

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a very good writer. You write with a experience pen. You open doors to thoughts and you speak to the reader. This poem could be broke down and discussed. Goal of any writer. To be read and maybe teach or show someone a better way or place. You do. I hope to read more of your work. Good to meet you. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Mufaro Kudakwashe Joseph Mangono]

Thank you very much will keep on trying.