Mirror of Myself

 

Through the trees she weaves, owning

the forest world that sweeps all around her.

She know's I'm there and turns to offer me a teasing glimpse,

the mischievous nymph she is.

I've seen her before and she seems but a mirror of myself,

and I longingly have hoped she will to me reveal her true self.

 

Her presence commands the heart of the forest,

the slivers of wood composing the towering trees,

sending a pulse of energy that ripples through winding river beds.

What gives her life, this being of allure and spirit carefree?

In the near distance she laughs, it echoes like cascading

gold coins being freed from confining treasure chests.

 

In her laugh there's a distinctive underlying sorrow,

and I understand her seemingly wild abandon.

I recognize the vibrato in her laugh as mine.

In an instance I remember the quest.

When the clock stopped and the air grew thick and heavy

because the universe called out to heal me.

 

I looked in the mirror one day and observed my dreamy eyed gaze

within sad, brown eyes pocketing the pale canvas of my face,

a shadowed suffering since the shattering of my naivety.

Bare feet pad away in seach of sanctuary.

Dark locks of hair tumbling to my waist,

I'm suddenly climbing a tree somewhat ungracefully.

 

Aiming for a solitude of mind where I can reign

as goddess of my magic infused lands.

A dream within a dream saves me from me.

Endless troubles and confusion melt away

and seep into the soft earth underneath.

Illusions conjured to set me free.

 

Reviews

[AlchemicPlutonian]

We love to watch ourselves. Reaching to endless depths to try to understand better.
Somewhere deep within, there's that part of us that is divinely attune, and throughout lifetimes we study, hoping one day to become that which we know we are. Absolutely astounding piece.

[MandaBear]

left me speechless Love it :) I enjoyed this piece.

[Writer *78*]

Very well constructed piece I would make little changes. 1. 4th stanza: 3rd line, what about shrouded instead of shadowed. 2. 4th stanza: 4th line, I think you mean search instead of what you originally wrote. I LOVE the Edgar Allan Poe reference "A dream within a dream" and I also liked how you tied it to Greek Mythology as well. Overall, I enjoyed this piece. I saw two people one being the man and the other a woman in a forest, correct me if Im wrong. Then as if you were on the nymphs body seeing parts of it almost. Well done.

[Melody Telleria]

Thank you for the review! I appreciate your feedback. I'll read through it again.
I actually didn't write it with the intention of implying that theres a man and woman but I can see how its posible to pull that out. I don't mind it. When I wrote it, I was thinking that the nymph I saw was myself.

[Writer *78*]

its still amazing

[Writer *78*]

you are without a doubt beautiful i can see how you thought of yourself as a nymph

[Melody Telleria]

That's sweet, thank you (= I do have an obsession with greek mythology and often like to weave myself into it

[Writer *78*]

thank you for the review he did mean alot i sent u a message please answer it