There's a long line

I dunno kind of ironic we all cut in lines once or twice so I pit it in different situations and the learning of patients

There's a long line
I wish not to be in
Just for a game
To take home and win 

There's a long line 
And It's dragging too
I cut a few places 
Whose gonna sue?

There's a long line 
No point to wait
I cut someone off
And they hit the gate 

There's a long line
At hospital doors 
A young woman and her son 
That had been crushed in that cars floors.

There's a long line
The doctors breaks through 
They are Gone he announces 
I wished it wasn't true

There's a long line
For a therapist I know
She can't help me
But I continue to go

There's a long line 
Of cars on the bridge across town
I get out and walk to the edge 
Finding myself looking down 

There's a long line
at the hospital  they couldn't save me
I would not cut in line 
And the bright lights I did see 

There's a long line 
To heaven or hell 
I am afraid I won't make it in 
Even though I had truthfully fell 

There's a long line 
To heaven that I'm quickly ushered in 
I know it is worth that wait 
For impatience wouldn't Help me win

Reviews

[Matt Shriver]

Well done. I loved it. You always write some amazing stuff. Keep it up.

[Ruth]

Beautifully executed love!
The pain and anguish of that long line can lead us to an eternity of torment! Then the crescendo, well, after that, more waiting!
Awesome!
xx

[taylor young]

i love this soo much..its so real and i love the emotions in it!!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I like it! The frustration really drives the emotion in a light hearted
manner. Reminds me of The Five Man Electrical Band.

[RavenDeschain]

That was very good. You really have talent. Keep up the good work!!

[MissWordSmith]

There's a long line ... For impatience wouldn't help me win.
This ''line'' you talk about... do you really mean a line? Or your own personal... journey?
I think this wasn't as well thought out as it could have been.

There's a long line
To heaven or hell
I am afraid I won't make it in
Even though I had truthfully fell (um, WHAT does that mean?)

[Arsenic Nemesis]

I like this a lot, very well written and though out. A lot of depth and emotion in this, great job, keep it up!~