Through a child's eyes

The things children see

He peers behind the corner
He listens to his daddy yell
He's of an innocent age
But has lived through hell 

He watches as daddy hits mommy
He cries his silent tears
He wants daddy to stop
To comfort him from his fears

He feels so helpless
He wants to stop the fighting
He steps around the corner and sees
Mommy was gone a terrible siteing 

He grew up just like him 
He was as mean as could be
He forgot about the eyes around the corner
His son who didn't need to see

Reviews

[Sabbath_Nikole]

"Mommy was gone a terrible siteing " i'm not sure what you mean with this line. do you mean a terrible site? This is a very delicate subject. A very good one to write about and make your own, but i feel that that this is the typical setting. It's too generic, we're always worry about children and domestic violence trickling down the line. It would of been interesting to see something that made this issue your own.

[ashley]

Fantastic poem. Great job! :D

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

I agree with the comment below. Beautifully written, I like this.

[Senseless whatever]

The cycle of abuse portrayed nicely here.

[Chelsea]

this is really good!
it really tells about the effects of abuse & how it's really a cycle

[deeps]

Wow! This is ever so sad really!
Wonderful flow and rhyme scheme.
Just so heartbreaking.
I enjoyed the read.