A cry for help

Sometimes we don't hear their cry

I wanted you to hear my voice To listen to my scream. To know I'm afraid. To see things aren't what they seem. I wanted you to save me. To be there when I fall. To wipe my tears. To stop it all. I wanted you to hold me close. To listen and to understand.  To break all my fears. To hold my hand. I wanted you to remove my thoughts. To stop me. To take the gun. To help me see  this didn't have to be. I needed you there To show your love. To stop the shot But now I fly above.

Reviews

[ashley]

This is amazing. Very powerful and well written. Great job!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Wow. This is one compelling piece of literature. You have the makings of a great writer.

[c.m.]

This a wonderful piece full of emotion. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Rhyming was good, and the overall piece was awesome. Nice work.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow this is a wonderful piece from the heart and that’s what poetry is all about. Great job well done keep it up.

[Senseless whatever]

Powerful write. Full of emotion. Longing for attention that doesn't come for whatever the reason.

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

Yes that is so true, how sad. You have certainly captured this "suicidal image" well. However, what is frightening is that it seems to confirm that cases of suicide reflect sometimes those who want the "living" to "hear and understand" them, after they are dead, and in so doing "the act" may be seen as a "means of revenge". I know life can be terribly painful, however there has to be other ways of gaining the attention of those whom we love, other than suicide. If you love me and I am not "listening or hearing" why would you want to make me suffer eternally on earth? I know suicidal cases can be much more complicated than this. One of the questions I always ask when encountering a case in question is this, "Was there no one to talk to?" Here I agree with you. "Couldn't anyone have seen this coming?" Sometimes we just get so "hooked up" in our own world that we can't "see through" our friends who "are not saying everything." The advent of secualrism and liberlism as much as it has given each individual a "breath of fresh air" is even more frightening as it so often leaves the human being "alone." There does not seem to be any more, "a common ground" on which we can all stand, to find strength to continue. Each individual seems to have to create his own foundation within our world which is becoming more and more pluralistic. Of course pluralism, does have its benefits. I think these situtions which are presently with us, begs of us as individuals, and as communities to reflect on where we are going as a people. Thank you for this piece you had me thinking.

vincent

[deeps]

This is so powerful and well expressed.
I like the emotions in this.
Wonderful flow and rhyme scheme.

[untoldtruth]

this was great, it was a powerful read for me becuase i once felt that way however it ended differently as you can see by the fact that i am typing :D
great job and keep up with the awesome writing