I just wish

Someone I love is in the hospital needing a heart transplant and I had a dre am about him. He is 17 and I am so scared for him but at times I wish he'd stop caring for me because it hurts.

I wish you could see yourself. I wish you could see what's at hand. Your becoming like everyone else. I just wish you would understand. I wish you would grow up. I wish you would see. Your not only hurting yourself . I just wish you'd stop hurting me. I wish you could hold me. I wish that everything was okay. You know all the right words. I just wish you had something to say. I wish you could have known. I wish you would have said goodbye. You never knew it be the last. I just wish you hadn't had to die.

Reviews

[Sabbath_Nikole]

Not sure how this relates to the issue you've got in your description.2nd to last line "You never knew it be the last." I think you meant It'd. And it'd be interesting to see you break out of the couplet rhyme scheme.

[Livana Lowell]

Aw, this is a sad piece that gives a gloomy tingle to my heart. However, I like the tingle, so it's fine.

Maybe the guy was trying not to focus on death. You shouldn't deny death, but you shouldn't depress over it eiether.

Also, the last line could've been rewritten. Hadn't had would be easily read like this: didn't or didn't have or something like that.

Anyways, I really like it. You have a style that's most distinct or unique is the better word.

Keep using that good old talent.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

this is a very powerful write, thank you for sharing

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

Really dramatic, however raw.
I wish he is well now.

Alex

[kirstey Lost,Crushed,Co..]

oh wow. this is amazing (: its so ssad :/

[L.I. Black]

I'm not sure which gets me more, the poem or the story behind it.

[Jane Doe]

I absolutely love this poem. It's so powerful, deep, and the wording is perfect. I hope your situation gets better and thank you so much for writing this. This a new favorite of mine.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem is very personal. You really opened up here.
This is golden.

[Senseless whatever]

Powerful write, great dedication.

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

there's not much more to add here than weep!

Vincent