How

A teen mother and father

 

How can you look me like that?

After all this times we've had?

How can you say those words?

Expect me not to be mad?

How could you hurt me this way?

Crush my heart in two?

How can you not see it?

Know that it's all because of you?

How can you watch me cry?

Not say a word?

How can you walk away?

Pretend you haven't heard?

How could you blame this all on me?

Act like you weren't involved?

How could you walk away from this chance?

This new world we have evolved?

How can you not want to see his face?

Watch him grow?

How do you expect me to explain this?

Say nothing and let you go?

How could you think I can do it by myself?

Raise him on my own?

How could you find it right?

Leaving your son and me alone?

Author's Note

This is not a personal experience but I know of people

Reviews

[snapstache]

Wow...
I dnt know how to explain it...
awesome and amazing and superb and all those really mean the same thing...
First, it flowed perfectly,
It had a rhyme scheme which I tend to lack at times,
I don't no words can't express how good you are.. :)
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[Kia-chan!]

Thats goo, 'cause for a second I thought you were talking about yourself! Anyhow, keep up the good work :)

[The Official Gary B]

This is really good sarah! I really like this, ALOT! Keep writing! =)

[MJ Durston]

Alright, well it's a great poem - I enjoyed it. I love the questioning, makes the experience, whether it's yours or someone else's, far more real. Because there are many times in an individuals life where we are faced with some of these very same questions. A couple of things, Grammar, it would greatly help improve your poem, so a few tips. I'm going to use your first stanza as an example of what I mean:

How can you look me like that?
After all this [these/those] times we've had,
How can you say those words?
Expect me not to be mad.

You don't need a question mark after every sentence, a comma in the second and a pariod in the last will suffice. Because the lines following the first and third sentence are statements not questions. I also fixed "this" to "these/those" depending on which tense you want it in, past or present.

Apart from all of that, I enjoyed it. You tapped into something real.

Keep Writing,
Melissa.

[Livana Lowell]

This poem touches on an issue that surrounds us today. As soon as the teenagers realize that you really CAN get pregnant when you have sex, then reality comes crashing down. The girl gets scared wanting support and the guy will do one or two things: take responsibilty or bail/run away as soon as possible. It's sad reallly. That's how we have so many fatherless children, but anyways...

Like ZoomZoom said, the poem flowed. The end rhymes didn't seem forced as some people attempt to do.

This new world we have evolved?

This line I questioned for a little bit, but then I realized whether you meant to do this or not, but new problems equals a new world. So, that questioned line makes this poem even stronger. I even like the question marks, that makes it stronger as well like you can feel the anxiety within the girl's tone.

Ya know, another cool part about this is that, this can be told in either pov, the boy's or the girl's so that's also what makes this poem pretty cool.

So, great write, I'm happy I read it. Well, kind of sad because of the mood of this poem, but you know what I mean.

[deeps]

This is quite the emotional read here.
I enjoyed this write.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

this is really sad:(... men who do that dont even deserve to be called men

[Senseless whatever]

This is a really powerful piece. Great job. The second half took me by surprise. Your observations are right on, I also know people. Fantastic.

[Tate Morgan]

An interesting write I like it I myself like to distill a piece to its nexus I trim them till all that remains is the center of the story.there are some errors in the sentences Not a lot >Mostly punctuation which I usually do not use since I am no good at it anyway lol

[Hailey]

wow i thought this was a personal experience from the way it was written, as if it came from the heart and all of the pain in the poem was ur own, very beautiful and emtional, good flow, good job