This rings reminiscent of an old epic styled poem. Feels like the opening to an old play. I love the meter of it...almost like the solider footsteps trudging through the aftermath of a dreary battle.
Another excellent piece. Your structure and format is damn near perfect. Your wording is appropriate to the subject but not overdone. Already you are a talented writer, but you improve with every piece you write. Keep it up!!!
The poem reminds me of "Dirt Room" by Blue October. Anyways, I like it too, has a very waterfall flow.
The sadness of having the betrayal of a friend; it's so not cool, but yeah, I could feel the lonliness in the beginning slowly churnning to rage and anger.
Absolutely adore it, and the best part about this poem is that it inspires me about one of my own books.
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