If you’d listen, if you’d hear, If you’d try I’d be here

About my friend who just keeps going down the wrong path. I can't help her anymore. I've tried for five years

Why don’t you listen to me?

You know that I care.

Do you honestly not see?

You know that I’m there.

 

Do you not hear what I’m saying?

Are you listening at all?

You see that I’m trying.

Why do you allow yourself to fall?

 

Your making a choice.

It’s one you don’t have to choose.

I can hear it in your voice.

Why are you making me loose?

 

You say I don’t understand.

You say I’ll never know.

I’m always here at hand.

Why are you pushing me to go?

 

You say it’s so easy for me to leave.

You should know that it’s not.

You keep searching for this relief.

I’m sorry this is all I got.

 

You beg me not go.

Yet you always say things hurt the most.

I still care even though.

I’m trying to explain it all through this post.

 

I wish you would open your eyes.

Just for a second see it my way.

Quit living in those lies.

Then maybe I could stay.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Eric Cox]

It's sad about your friend. This poem shows heart and is done so very well.

[kirstey Lost,Crushed,Co..]

oh wow...this amazing :D

[ashley]

Powerfully written. This is fantastic! :D

[Jared]

I commend you that you feel comfortable writing about this situation. It takes great courage to write about such a sensitive topic. I'm sorry that you've lost friend. It always is a truly sad thing. My prayers will be with you both.

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

This is beautiful, a very moving piece. I've been in similar situation...

[C.J.G.]

Very, very moving. I can feel the emotion radiate off of the words. I also really love the structure. It is an easy read on the eyes so the reader does not have to try too hard... Stunning! Kudos!

[TearsDontCompute]

You are a fantastic writer. I'm so jealous! (:

[Keevan]

thank you for teh requests (sory if i was a little late with a few of them) but i LOVE YOUR WRITING!!! THis was a very mvoing piece. you have potential as a writer! Well Done!!! :)

[lawrence bear]

a very moving piece, thanks for sharing

[L.I. Black]

The emotion is wonderful. I have to agree with Kit Kat, flow is amazing as well as the rhyme scheme.
The flow of it all helps the emotion go throughout the poem even more so.
Quite wonderful, dear.