Alone

At the front of the crowd
Tartly, looking around.
there are many faces in the cobweb.
All looking passed out.
I scream out to the silence, only to hear
my words come out.

Which sound shall I make today
To be noticeable
I have Failed At the front of squirter
My voice is no longer my shield or weapon
No one acknowledges my presence.
Its painful being alone in a crowd

Won by laughing, lost and weeping .
Everyone gone
I saw that there was nothing left.
Accumulated desires falling,
Firmly into the soil

Author's Note

Feel free to coment..

Reviews

[barleygirl]

You have expressed a number of interesting & true-to-life observations here, but as a whole, I'm not following the flow of ideas. It feels like a scattering of statements about how being alone in a crowd feels, but I don't understand the final couplet to be a culmination of all these ideas. The best part of your writing is that everything is originally stated, even when the ideas are familiar & relatable.

[Mansu vml]

Its abt somebody who isnt appreciated for his work or who is rejected by all...who is unnoticed by any...who feel so lonely in this world

[Mansu vml]

Thanks..thumbs up

[Farha Nayamee]

well done with the poem....good work....

[Mansu vml]

Farha 😎 thanks

[InkAndScrolls]

I enjoyed this. It's very true. We can be lonely in a crowd.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Living in a crowd of loneliness, features of indifference clouding the skies I can hear your scream all the way to my eyes.

regards,
al

[SZHZIA]

Loneliness has an inseparable relation with silences, but sometime we feel both of them in crowd where a huge crowd of people exists. we experience it when we loss something special of our life. your poem reflects this experience and observations that you have in your life. a lovely poem on loneliness and its consequences, MSR. Thanks for sharing. keep writing

Best
Szhzia

[Sira YR]

I liked it but as barleygirl stated, i'm having a little trouble following the flow of ideas as well. I understand what the poem is about: being in a huge crowd of people yet feeling all alone, as though you are by yourself, but it feels (as barleygirl said) scattered. However I like your word choice, and as individual couplets I liked them. You just need to find a way to let your ideas flow a little better. But barelygirl already said all of that. Keep on writing! :)

[.]

I understand the sentiments in this poem, being alone amongst a crowd, be it tens or billions and being unnoticed and unappreciated.

This idea is easily recognisable, perhaps work on the flow of words throughout so that the piece maintains a level of consistency until its conclusion.

Otherwise, a fine idea.

[YanZeros]

This poetry reminds me of the song "I Started A Joke". This is true when all we wanted is just to be heard or feel we exist or belong to the society. Nicely written Sam.d :)

[Hebe]

There are my faces in the cobweb.....wonderful description....i felt the loneliness. ...

[Valentine]

Nothing worse than feeling alone in a crowd, especially when you want to be noticed. Expressive write. Valentine

[Mansu vml]

Thanks for your encouragement..

[Surya]

haa loneliness......I loved it.

[Mansu vml]

Loneliness or poem ? 😀
Anyway thanks for liking and review

[Surya]

Haha...i loved poem.