The Stalker

He smelt it as she passed by him while jogging. That lemony, fresh smell that came out of her hair as she was running. The same smell that came out of her lingerie drawer, the one contained in the shampoo and lotion bottles in her bathroom cabinet. Ah! How he loved going through her things, touching what she had touched, lying down on the sheets she had slept on, inhaling the same air she had breathed in.

 And now her jogging was coming to an end. Soon, she would be upstairs, taking her clothes off, checking herself in the mirror, right before taking a shower. And today was special. He was in for a treat. She had forgotten to take the blinds down. He got so excited at the idea that he didn't think to check the road before crossing. He really should have, though. Because, then, he would have seen the truck coming straight at him. And, now, he wouldn't be lying lifeless on the street. And he wouldn't have missed her graceful movements as she was taking her clothes off.

 At least he still had her smell. The lemony, fresh smell in the last breath he ever took.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

YOU FREAK! Only a freak of a similar feather could’ve written something so true-to-life! *smile* I was mesmerized by your careful storytelling, such a brief vignette, but chock full of delicious details told with vivid imagery! These very short snippets are perfect length for short attention spans online. It’s wise to get good at telling such a quickie with a punch, as you’ve done here. I need to go practice doing this while your inspiration is fresh in my mind (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for your encouraging review!I'm glad that you find the story realistic and that you enjoyed the details and imagery!It means a lot to me!

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

WEll- what good you give out you get back and what bad you give or think returns the same- no coincidences in this life- interesting write🌹

[Lost_Soul]

Life is full of surprises and consequences. He learned his lesson as his life ended.

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for your time to read and comment!I appreciate it!

[Lost_Soul]

You're welcome. Anytime.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

My pleasure🌹

[alanwgraham]

Good work - you've written a very satisfying story in a few words. That is a real skill. I like that justice is done but too bad for the truck driver.
Regards,
Alan

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you so much for the encouraging review!I appreciate it!Indded too bad for the driver for getting caught up in all of this!Thanks again!

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't know. Do dead people hold memory? I enjoyed this story. I thought a bad ending for the woman. Man received due payment. Thank you Ms Paragon. I enjoyed this story.
Coyote

[Ms Paragon]

I am glad you liked it!I appreciate your time to read and comment!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this one and you are welcome Ms Paragon.

[Neville]

I am apt to agree with Donna, this is a great little story and well told, I was certainly not expecting the poor old stalker to be nipped in the bud like that...... poetic justice maybe..............Neville

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you so much!I appreciate your time to read and comment!

[Neville]

pleasure.......

[Donna]

This is a great short story! What a surprise ending! I love it!

[Ms Paragon]

I am so glad you enjoyed it!Thank you for the encouraging comment.I appreciate it!

[Gee]

OUCH.....better keep my eyes peeled :))

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment!

[wordman]

poetic justice i guess,liked it

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you so much!I am glad you enjoyed it!

[wordman]

you`re welcome