The Coffee

The Coffee

A Story by Ms Paragon

He has been longing for a cup a coffee. A cup of coffee to wake him up that  dark, rainy morning. He lit another cigarette without putting out the one in his hand and he found himself with two lit cigarettes staring in the distance.

 "What can I get you?" He startled but kept staring in the distance. There was something about other people's eyes that made him feel uncomfortable. "Coffee. Black. Please." The waitress went away. He was safe again. He went on smoking. There were so many things to worry about, so many things to consider. He saw the waitress approaching. Finally. He was going to have his coffee.

 A clumsy move later and his precious coffee along with the water in the tray put out his cigarette. And there his was that  dark, rainy morning. Without a cigarette, without coffee,staring in the distance.

© 2018 Ms Paragon


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This is a subtle ending . . . you don’t really SAY that everything got tipped over, but we can deduce that happening, from the hints you give. Nice snippet of a character, showing the desperation with dramatic details such as two cigs at once. I know how it feels to be in a public place but wishing I didn’t have to interact with anyone . . . just get me my coffee! *smile* Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ms Paragon

6 Years Ago

These are the exact sentiments I was trying to portray!Thank you so much for your thoughtful review!
I really enjoyed this. I like how you seem to write short snippets in someone's life. The moments might not seem extraordinary, but you still make it entertaining to me. Really, A+ :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ms Paragon

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind review!I appreciate it!
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Gotta have coffee. Just poured my 2nd cup whilst reading your well written piece. As for smoking, nowt worse than a woman that tastes like an ashtray and has hair and clothes that stink. Perhaps male smokers find it a turn on, who knows, each to their own.
Good morning Ms P ( you sound like a 007 Secretary) hope you are well.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ms Paragon

6 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment!I am so glad you enjoyed it!I am also a coffee lov.. read more
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Oh, coffee missed along with that smoke!!
Thanks for sharing this clumsy moment with all of us😊
- Tahsin. Z

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ms Paragon

6 Years Ago

I am glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for taking the time to read and comment!
A wonderful short story. A needed cigarette and some coffee. I do need daily. I liked the real life feel and the real thoughts in the story. Thank you Ms paragon for sharing the amazing story.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ms Paragon

6 Years Ago

Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it!
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

I did enjoy and you are welcome Ms Paragon.

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Added on April 11, 2018
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