Roses and Dark Sand

Turning, forever turning

Lay amongst the blackened sand

Of which is held inside your hand

 

Holding, forever holding

Touch the wicked suns of day

Hold my heart; forever stay

 

Loving, forever loving

Offering a rose with gentle nature's touch

Holding it softly with a child's clutch

 

Reaching, forever reaching

Buried within the enchanting dream

Eyes lost in a reflective gleam

 

Turning, forever turning

On a beach, in a place of our own

With just a rose and a ghost unknown

Author's Note

I am going to redo this poem, but I mostly wanted to just get the idea/basis for it down.

Reviews

[Blue Sky]

wonderfully written piece, like the flow and has a rhythm to it. I enjoyed reading!

[Rainbow Skank]

Amazingly beautiful

[BDKR]

The cadence is awesome!

[Colm]

I like the ryming scheme. Good poem

[awkward turtle]

this is beautiful, lovely imagery. it seems to have a dark feeling to it...or perhaps not dark exactly, but moody. it's not a happy poem, but it's not depressing either. that works really well; excellently done.

[Intern'l Shultzfeather]

The yearning goes to burning in my take, nice traveling along. Some fine images I really enjoyed. Very romantic tone haunting ending, cool

[Michelle Raye]

Surprised this got as many views as it did, with it basically just being a draft

[Cynthia]

Great Work!!!!!
I agree that you have a great ending too!

[Cassiopia Summers]

Great ending. You brought the poem to an outstanding ending, and I am excited to read what you edit and mold this into. (:

[Short.Nerd]

I like this. (: Nicely done. It has a nice beat to it. Keep up the good work.