Cataclysm

The figure of girl is buried inside
this trembling human I've kept alive

In her eyes she spills her soul
but in her words you'd never know

There is a girl
There was a love 
And now she feels no more

The girl was possessed by a spark
A light in her that went dark

A brilliant piece of loyalty
Turned her into the me you see

She has no shame, but carries no pride
An empty hole tears her open wide

A vortex pulling in from her heart break
Takes her mind away from any soul shake

There is a girl
There was a love
And now she feels no more

Reviews

[Brittney]

I love the couplets you used and the honesty of the words. Beautiful poem, thank you for sharing.(:

[Shaunna Harper]

Hmm I see something negative AND positive in this...not sure what to make of the meaning, but I really do like it. Very well written, and good use of rhyme. :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The lines flow... the story retells and moves on... I was caught with this line:

Turned her into the me you see
Turned her into me you see...

Besides that... thanks for sharing...

[Samuel Jack]

Thats a very vivid heartbreak poem! it didnt flit around to all the different reasons or build up, it was just the pure feeling of heartbreak and despair at its core. Enjoyed this poem. keep up the good work.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Very strong piece... well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

"There is a girl
There was a love
And now she feels no more"
It is sad when we lose the myth of love and life. The above lines are true. Age and mistakes teach us to be safer and take less chances. Which it is sad. Better to test life and hope for a good landing. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote