Fall From Grace

Come with me to where I dwell, 

a place that I know very well. 

Take my hand don’t be afraid, 

I will show you where hell is made.

Hear my cries and hear my call, 

hear the error of my fall. 

I’ll stop time so you can breathe, 

trap you where there is no key.

Leave you hanging in the place, 

you ridiculed me to my face, 

where I met you and you met me, 

I’ll show you how cruel I can be.

I don’t fear and I don’t hear, 

I’ll let you rot inside a tear. 

You can’t run and you can’t hide, 

I plan to kill you from inside.

I cry tears of sorrow and of hurt, 

you offend me with your dirt, 

backstab me when I can’t see, 

tell me lies and bury me.

In hate and lunacy I’m reborn; 

see what a soul feels like to be torn? 

With hate I stand because in your face, 

I see the angels fall from grace.

And when you hear a lullaby, 

your baby boy will start to cry. 

No innocents will live in hate; 

I’ve taken them all to the devils gate.

Here I burn what’s pure and good, 

ridiculed and misunderstood. 

One smile for one moment that we stand apart, 

till I open my arms and let you rip out my heart.

Now I’m corrected and now I’m whole, 

without my heart you can’t touch my soul. 

The hate you spawned won’t be relenting, 

your life without me never-ending.

So close your eyes and come with me, 

this is my world and reality.

July 2007

Reviews

[CecilA]

Mockingjay,

This poem of yours brought chills down to my soul; weird, scarey and yet profound. It's a journey I would only take by force; unwilling to let you take my hand. Better have cuffs or anesthesia.

Have you considered expanding on it? It's relevent to the currrent audience of readers. If you know an illustrator, you might want to consider a mixed media presentation.

I love it and sense it's potential.

Great write. 'Come to me to where I dwell' . No way. But really, what's it like. I need to know more.

Thanks for sharing. Sincerely, CecilA

[Lily Mae]

That is a fall from Grace.. and the evil spawn gets to be the God and deliver the karma on a plate of revenge and blood.. Nice work..
But.. maybe this person is so far gone...they are already dead before you can impale..xo ;)

[Mockingjay]

Interesting... maybe they are both far gone...

[Lily Mae]

:) sometimes like attracts like.. it was a great write.. xo

[Mockingjay]

Thanks :) it felt good.

[ewest1220]

Wow, just wow. I love it! The last two lines really tied it together!

[n8adamczak]

awesome, "Now I’m corrected and now I’m whole,

without my heart you can’t touch my soul." love that line

[Androglossia]

I'm totally breathless. This is fu***ng amazing! It's like an endless swirl of darkness in heaven's gate.
The poem is haunting yet alluring. It shows a lot of emotions- hatred and vengeance.
Your linguistic style is very captivating and great use of metaphor too. I like the descriptive nature
of it and you have the skill to convey images into the minds of the readers. Good job!

[The Watcher]

This is a long, but really awesome poem. It's also very deep and I can sense the pain within it. Kudos to you

[....]

WOW!!!!!
This is totally amazing,
I really like this, So deep really,
also could be inspiring too
if you can see through it.
Amazing write

[Whales]

This is whaleiful, A lot of fascinating imagery! Very nice poem, and just so you know, I put on a beat and made it into a rap song. Because that is what my life consists of. Anyway well done. Your work will soon be noticed I think and when it is i'll be like, "yo what I tell myself?" Because all I do is talk to myself. get it? Okay finally have 3 points to this review. let's try to get as many as possible...ierhguierwuirhgweuirhgjerhgjehuihauigerhigphergwherijwgherijghegheirhwicerhgierhwgierhjghfjhgiejfgierhnvgkjdfnvkjfnjvnerjgherjnujerhngjerhngujrhnjfvnenjnvjerhnjrhjrhjerhghrghrghghghrhgurghurhurhurhurghgruhrguhgruhuhgrurhurhugurghurghurghurghurghrguhrguhrguhrguhguhurhughurghurghurghurghurghrguhrguhguhguhrurhughuhurhurhurghughugrhurghurghurghurghrguhrguhguhuhrguhruhughuhguhrurghurhurghurghrguhrguhrguhgurhughuhrghurghurghurghrguhurghrguhrguhruhuhughuhughurghughurghurghgruhuhghughurhurghuhgurhuhuhurghrgughurghrguhruhurghurhruhuhuhuhguhruhrguhrguhrughrughurhrguhrguhruhruhruhruhrguhruhuhuhgurhurghurghrghruhruhguhrhguhrguhrguhrguhrguhrguhrguhrguhrguhrghrguhrguhurhurghughurghrguhguhhurghurghurghrguhrguhgurghgghughruehworuighrhrogvivmrcmvfvjrjfjeorjfjcnwiekirjfjejrhjfjerjfjweweeewewueueifuiruiruiuerieuirueirwioeqfjpeiufirergierjcrmwijerifjerifjerijferjpfi4jifjrifjwirojpfirjwgiojgijpriogwjeriwgjripegjcricgmerijgicerpgmerijgjirjieogjirjigjsoidfkjdkfjirjfurhghrfhrjjorfjejcsjeofi jfisjifjrifjurfhurfhughuhuhugthughuhguhguhguhyuyhuhjjijrijfijrfijfijrfjrfijrfijrfijrfirfjijrfirfjirfjifjifjirjfijfirjfirjifjfirjfirjfirjfrijfirjijfrifjirfjrfjirjfifjirjfrijfirfjirfjirfjrifjifjirjfirjirfjrifjrifjirjfirjfirjfirjfirjfirfjirjfirjfirjfirjfirjfirjifjrifjrifjirjfirjfirfijrifjrifjrijfirjfirjfirjfirjfirjfirjfri YES 10 POINTS. ok bye.