Prey

It isn't a story, nor a poem, it's just something random I came up with lol

I can hear the birds chirping 

         I can see them flying 

           with their delicate wings

             looking fiercely

           ready to hunt down 

                                     their prey

                                               but fail to do so

                                                  as they run away

                                            go out of reach

                                             and those birds

                                                  lash out

                                           their mouths watering

                                          in hunger 

                                          and in pain

                           as they end up 

                       falling down

                       in a pit

                        filled with

                       what they needed the most

                         worms

                         their prey

                

Reviews

[Bear]

It is always exciting to see a writer experimenting with different forms and styles to present their thoughts and feelings.This is a good writing exercise and shows the passion and strength of your desire to keep improving your craft. Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Coyote Poetry]

Nature is honest. Birds must eat and worms become food. Nice use of words and thoughts my friend. Thank you for sharing the amzing poetry.
Coyote

[Joanna Matilda Barlow]

This is a Poem... But i do admire the enthusiasm. It shows something coming. I can sense it. I know that if you were to dig deeper... You'd find something more deeper. I just know it.

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Interising form almost feel like worm. Ha just try to be funny. Your words very well describe why some victims cannot be avoid if life have to be on life. Thank you so much

[Tony Jordan]

How befitting and so like nature in it's ironic cruelty at times for the predator to fall into a place to be devoured by it's former prey.
Nice thought and well executed experimental piece Mr W.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Very well written Mr. Writer. Such a vivid words you have used in here.

Sincerely,
CAPOLAVORO

[Zoya]

Oh yeah, nicely structured this one. Good job. Keep the ideas coming...and keep experimenting!

[Sinbulvinter]

Really good story telling in this, really deep and makes me think.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Very well penned.. amazing poem kept me interested

[Wajiha Nayeem]

very well done...keep it up

[Najam Us Saher]

Very descriptive. You have created a nice imagery and I loved the way this poem was presented.