To be in your shoes... (Poem)

The pressure to succeed

If only you could understand

how it feels like

the pain, the agony

and the need to succeed

Everyone relying on you, alone

to win for all of them

keep the country proud

and it's head up

Applause's heard from miles away

to boost your spirit up

and if you make a mistake

rocks and taunts thrown at you

Feelings hurt and energy drowning

adrenaline rushing harder then ever

trying your very best to cover up

for that one mistake you made

Everyone think's its easy

then why don't they try

so they can understand how it feels

to be in your shoes

Reviews

[49k_jdys]

Wow, I've totally felt this way. This poem is so relatable. Thank you!

[Mr.Writer]

No, thank you! Glad you could relate :))

[CAPOLAVORO]

You are trying to send the awareness of emphatic thought on this one ey? Well, very well written there my friend. Through a poem is such a great way of releasing that sense of humanity to all of us. Beautiful.

Sincerely,
CAPOLAVORO

[Mr.Writer]

Yeah, I'm really glad you could interpret meaning of my poem! :)
Thank you so much Capolavora :))

[Priyanshi]

Well written, friend..one who thinks that's easy must try first, so that they can understand it.
Loved the poem.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Priyanshi :))

[Sam]

Wow! I definitely liked this poem! How well you portrayed your thoughts, and the overall idea of it. I especially liked the fith and third line, how quickly people are to criticize you even when they've never tried. It was a really good!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Sam! :))

[matrixmark]

The pressure to succeed, is indeed one which can bear a heavy burden on the shoulders. The last bit of your piece is the one which I connected with. I know it was a short piece, but again this was another piece of yours which had such good depth to it and was really well worded. I only wish I could produce such poems, but alas I never will be able to compete with poets like yourself who always seem to have a great knack of putting over such meaningful words.

Great piece AGAIN mr writer. Always a fan of your work.

Mark.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Mark!! :)
I agree with you, it's a heavy burden that's hard to handle at times
Poetry is poetry, there are no bad poems, cause they're usually written from ones heart :)
You can definitely write poems, just pour your heart out! :)
Well, I don't know if I can compete with your amazing and engaging storytelling :D
Thank you once again Mark!! :)

[matrixmark]

Welcome.
The only poem I ever did was a comical laundry poem and somebody thought it was really funny. But I will never post it up.

Storytelling - It takes a lot of hard work to tell an engaging story and I am happy you find mine amazing...I try really hard.

Mark.

[Mr.Writer]

Why not! You should Mark, we'd love to read it!
No problem Mark! I'm really looking forward to your book and as I said earlier, I will be the first one to buy it :D

[matrixmark]

Maybe one day.

The book comes first.

Mark.

[Joanna Matilda Barlow]

Sounds like me... Everyday people judge me for what i am... and for who i happen to be. but none seem to understand me... not really. Maybe this poem grabs me in a way as it speaks of how it must feel for me. That maybe people should walk and live my life. Walk in my shoes. Be in my shoes so they will at last understand the very pain that i withstand and go through... every single day. Maybe they should see it as if they're seeing me. That way... maybe they'll know what it's like to be in the shoes of another person. Remarkable poem. Very solid and memorable. Relation: To how i feel at times. BRAVO!

[Mr.Writer]

You're beautiful just the way you are Joanna :)
I so agree with you as well! Using a quote from 13 reasons why... "Everyone want's to talk, no one wants to do anything" they just want to enjoy the drama and not prevent it... I'm glad you could relate to it, because you're no different from us, you're also a human being :)
Thank you so much!! :)

[Mr.Write]

"You either die a hero or live long enough to see yourself become the villain."

It's just how we are: eager to root for you but also eager to rail against you if you fall.

[Mr.Writer]

I agree with you Mr.Write!
Thank you! :)

[G. Writing]

I enjoyed reading this :)

[Mr.Writer]

I`m glad you enjoyed! Thank you! :)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

woah...
amazing write.
so much strength it had, keep it up shaan!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Wajiha! :)

[Bear]

To be in the public eye ones faults and failures are the focus of their interest in these modern times. So you last stanza gives impact making your poem linger in your readers mind. Nice depth, the only problem I have with your poem is I wear a size 15eeeee shoe :~) Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Mr.Writer]

Haha, thank you Bear! :D