The drowning sun

I'm lost in the beauty 

of the drowning sun

my eyes, steady to the horizon

watching the sun cast it's golden rays

upon the clouds

as it leaves its bleeding marks in the sky

and begins to descend 

into the ocean

the colors changing fast

as the drowning sun

soon disappears

its warmth fading

leaving a cold feeling

within me

Reviews

[Joanna Matilda Barlow]

Such elegant emotion. A feeling of calm and yet a little sad. Nice poem. It really is a swell poem. Maybe i should start getting into doing some poetry. Stuff like this might do me some good. Letting out what it is that i feel deep inside. It'd be a rather good read. Wouldn't you think? Keep up the good poetry. there might be something deeper coming from you yet. Wouldn't you figure? It's always good to read a nice made poem. Always uplifting. Never a drag. Poems like these... i'd read anytime.

[Mr.Writer]

Poetry indeed lets us pour out what we're feeling inside of us, maybe like something really deep as you said!
I'm really glad that you might start doing poetry! :) Thank you so much Joanna!

[Black Jess]

Absolutely love it *-*
You captured the wonderful moment of sunset in a beautful way !
I can feel every second you're describing and it's giving me warmth
Simply Beautiful *-*

[free will]

I like this poem. It evokes images and feelings. Well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful poem shared my friend. The setting sun. Is a beautiful site. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Kalea Barger]

Your emotions come through so strongly in this piece. The imagery of the sun and the sky, the feeling of juxtaposition I felt personally when you compared the remnants to bleeding marks reminded me of how bittersweet a sunset can be. I also appreciated how you decided to break up your poem. Each stanza moves me in a different way, bringing through different emotions each time, moving with time as the sun sets. I have been lost many times in the beauty of the sunset, and this piece does a lovely job bringing out the emotions and imagery that comes along with drowning suns.

[Dinesh Kumar]

Excellent piece of writing
Really enjoyed

[49k_jdys]

So wonderful and peaceful! Just a quick thought: "it's" in the fourth line should be "its."

[Mr.Writer]

Alrighty, thank you for the correction! :)

[KCthelastboyscout]

Watching the sun rise or set is one of the great gifts as a human being. This is a beautiful declaration of admiring words and vivid imagery.A pleasure

[Mr.Writer]

Thanks so much!

[emmajoy]

'.. my eyes, steady to the horizon ~ watching the sun cast it's golden rays ~ upon the clouds.. '

The Sun's never ever gone. It's more a daily visitor that comes bearing the most incredible gift: another morning to inhale and savour. Then when it whispers goodbye, it leaves memories on which to dine. Surely.? And that for me is much of what you say, with a little sadness thrown in because.. you're you, a very fine poet.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Emma! :) I really appreciate the review :)

[AcasualPawn]

Beautiful sun leaving behind bleeding marks and cold feeling....

Like every other beautiful thing.

Nicely penned

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you SSR! :))