A genuine smile (poem)

A smile under the ocean...

Imagine an ocean

swim to the bottom of it

and you'll find me

My body, numb and cold;

bloated and dirty

caressed by the fishes

Come back later;

you'll see me at the top

looking deadly

But, look closely;

as you'll see a smile

from that very face of mine

A smile that freed me

from all the pain it gave;

a genuine smile

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Dead and a smile. A odd way to go. You create some wild visions for the reader my friend. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[HeyJadeXO]

sad to sense the suffering in these words but beautifully written

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Jade! :)

[Priyanshi]

Good poem, it is.... overall I enjoyed it. keep on writing.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Priyanshi! :)

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure.

[Prashant Bajpai]

a genuine poem which completely fulfills it tittle

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Prashant! :)

[Kittenincake]

Terrifyingly satisfying as it sounds like the victim wanted this all along. Ironically, I find this to be a happy ending. Perception really is everything.

[Mr.Writer]

There's many ways to interpret it, but you've got it right! As the title and poem hint "genuine smile"
Thank you Kaliope! :)

[Im His Daughter]

Deep but freeing in the end.. keep smiling Mr. Writer

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you! :) Keep smiling too :)

[Dawn]

Unsettling, but lovely just the same. You startled with the image of bloated, but your words produced that poignancy that caters to our longing. Lovely

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Dawn! :)

[Caroline]

I like this poem, the feeling of the poem is deep, and strong. it makes me think about a person who comes back stronger and suffered from pain.Good poem

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Caroline :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Feels like you've certainly worked on your style of writing :)
I liked the imagery in this one. Nice work, Shaan.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Yumna! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Shaan :)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

beautifully written...i loved it.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Wajiha!! :)