Downfall (Poem)

Pouring out emotions...

Left alone, stranded

to be broken apart

and have no hope left

Thoughts kept to self

ego and soul all dead

nothing left inside

Laughs and smiles

so hard and difficult

knowing they're all fake

Having a downfall

heart buried within

deeper than the ocean

Love once shown

and returned to

but fake love it was

Sun fading away

clouds fading in

no light to be seen

The world

being a maze

showing no escape

Personal space

no more a thing

all secrets kept from self 

Reviews

[Kaname :)]

tha's a beautiful poem. you could make a book of poems :)

[Mr.Writer]

Haha, thank you! :)

[Kaname :)]

you're welcome :)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

BEAUTIFULLY written...keep going.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you!

[Hope]

I esp liked the last stanza.
Its different and true.
"Secrets kept from self"
Great poem shaan:)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Neetha! :)

[CAPOLAVORO]

There are a lot of emotions being portrayed in this poem. I would love more of it if you could add some. Good one still. :)

[Mr.Writer]

I know, it kinda felt incomplete at the end, and it would probably have been best to add more
Thank you Capolavoro!! :)

[Ethan]

So you write this nicely, but most of these are, if not all, incomplete sentences. You lose me there, my friend. It still contains a great message, but just like the sentences, it feels a bit incomplete. Overall, good job though. :)

[Mr.Writer]

Lol yeah, I agree, I kinda tried to make it that way, but will do better :)
Thank you Ethan!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

When we are heartbroken. Life become lonely and sad. Hard to see the laughter and joy till we heal. I liked the honest tone and real life feel to the words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Coyote!! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Sam]

I definitely enjoyed this, the poem was well written and I loved the meaning behind it! Keep up the good work!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Sam!! :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Sad but very good poem.
Each line is meaningful and lovely..

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Farhan :)

[matrixmark]

I don't know what else to add after many have said what I wanted to say.
So I will only add this - heartbreakingly beautiful piece.

Mark.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Mark!! :)

[matrixmark]

No worries Shaan. Anytime (when I get time...lol)

Mark.

[Mr.Writer]

Lol :D Yep

[Sofia]

A perfect poem on life. Font size is apt. You write beautifully. Keep writing :)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Sofia! :)

[Sofia]

Most welcome :)