This feeling... (Poem)

This feeling, comes back and forth...

Every second of its torture forces me to stop breathing 

It turns my world upside down and unleashes new terrors

Makes my life hollow, like a ghost;

not like those cool ghosts at Hogwarts, more like the deadly ones... 

I go from happy to sad, to being super hyped 

Get weaker and pale, while it becomes stronger and powerful

It makes me feel like a tissue;

always being used and wasted for ones motive

It turns my heart into stone;

having no feelings for anyone anymore

Sucks on all the positive thoughts, like it's candy

Spreading all over my body, like wildfire

Burning my heart crisply

Consuming what's left of me

By: MrWriter(Shaan)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

When we are filled with anger and disappointment. Easy to lose our kindness.
"Makes my life hollow, like a ghost;
not like those cool ghosts at Hogwarts, more like the deadly ones...
I go from happy to sad, to being super hyped "
I did like the above lines. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[apennylate]

A beautiful illustration of budding romance... Not a fan of the Hogwarts line, as it slightly pulls me away from the stunning word choice in your poem... Like a vacuum sucking the positivist away in all of us... So does lust tend to burn away all oxygen within... Brightly penned...

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Silente! :)

[apennylate]

Maybe it is just me being sour over being called Harry Potter cause of my glasses back in high school, haha... My pleasure, Shaan...

[Mr.Writer]

Haha XD. I know how that feels

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Spreading all over my body, like wildfire
Burning my heart crisply
Consuming what's left of me"

Hmm, quite deep. That feeling ain't nice. But you've penned out how that feels pretty well.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Yumna! :) Really appreciated

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Shaan. A pleasure always :)

[Mr.Writer]

I was wondering to do another collab with you lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

hmm well, we will some time soon :) I'm pretty short on time these days :|

[Mr.Writer]

Oh, no problem :)
Take your time

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:P thanks :))

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[Aubrey Harrell]

I love the mood. It is fantastic Writer, definitely one of your best works. Keep it up, Writer! :)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Signature!! :)

[Jessica Lima]

'Consuming what's left of me'

Those words hit me pretty hard. I can relate to so much... specially the change in mood.

This was really nice to read!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Jessica!! :)

[heartspeaks]

Did you just steal my thoughts....This is exactly what i feel at times....This poen is extremely relatable...
I go from happy to sad, to being super hyped
It makes me feel like a tissue;
always being used and wasted for ones motive
It turns my heart into stone;
having no feelings for anyone anymore
These just left me astound...
Poetry is not just some play of words or using high-fi sober sentences...It is what touches the readers even in its simplest forms... I like this ... Thank you for writing....

[Mr.Writer]

Lol thank you so much Heart! Really appreciated

[Kesha]

I really liked this one here Shaan! Just one thing.. this line feels sort of out of place

"not like those cool ghosts at Hogwarts, more like the deadly ones.."

Don't get me wrong I love HP but it didn't seem to flow nicely with the rest, other than that this was wonderful!

[Mr.Writer]

Thanks so much Kesha!! :) Really appreciated. You spotted it :D
I also kept on reading that ghost line, cause it seemed to not flow well but I was lazy to change it lol

[Kesha]

haha :P ..

[Bear]

Interesting point of view, I think everyone has experienced that eerie feeling that is so hard to put into words. It will be interesting to see how how different readers will interpret this, I like it Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much bear! :)
I agree we all must have felt like that before

[Hope]

I like the way you write...
The content is complex yet the poem is smooth to read.
Great work!

[Wajiha Nayeem]

Shaan..this is awesome..the way you have written each line with felt emotions has made this poem a really effective one..great work..

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Wajiha!