Struggles (Poem)

I'm drowning in an ocean

Struggling to breathe

The salt water reaching into my mouth

Turning my shrieks into soft moans 

Not being able to talk, as my mouth seals shut

All my emotions soon sinking

Leaving me to fall deep down in the ocean, forever

By: MrWriter (Shaan)

Author's Note

Just some thoughts and feelings to share. What do you think the meaning is?
And yes, there's a meaning to it :)

Reviews

[Najam Us Saher]

Very nicely expressed your emotions by symbolizing it with ocean. I liked it. Beautifully written. ☺

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Najam!

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome ☺

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I actually agree with Saud. Forever is a deep word. One can never really drown forever. Either you learn how to swim or you get pulled out or you die... There's always a positive side to things however may we overlook... This being said, I liked the imagery in this one. Salt water reaching into my mouth, that's a nice expression of being bound...
Good write..

[Mr.Writer]

True, I meant to say something else, but it didn't match.
Thank you so much Yumna! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh it fits here. I just pointed out how I perceived it 😉
You're welcome. Always a pleasure 😊

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[Stacy Purvis]

It could mean many things, and art is interpreted by the viewer. In this instance I feel as though you are drowning in an ocean, body succumbing and sinking to the bottom.
Will you die? I'm not sure...

[Mr.Writer]

It could mean many things for sure.
Thank you Anastasia!

[Abhishek Asthana]

its like almost grief-stricken... beautifully done...
keep writing

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Abhishek!

[apennylate]

The meaning... Uhh... Drowning in... An ocean...? Heh, deeply penned...

[Mr.Writer]

Lol :D Sort of...
Thank you Silente! :P

[apennylate]

Lol, I figured... Am quite terrible at deciphering meaning... I tend to find my own in everything...

[Saud Maroof]

It is never "forever" I bet with all my luxuries on it. This poem hits the right chords to get a grasp of one's struggles. The tension of a violin suits better with an anxious player who trains for perfection. With time he will swim with waves and drown in muse. Thank you for sharing

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Saud! I agree, a violin piece may fit this poem, according to the high and low notes. :)