Welcome (Poem)

Welcome (Poem)

A Poem by Mr.Writer

My hearts pounding
My hands are trembling
White light beams right at my face, forcing me to continuously twitch
I try to move but the searing pain in my stomach stops me
I take deep breaths, but they aren`t deep enough
It`s as if I`m in a ocean, struggling to swim and stay alive.
I groan as a scalpel cuts right through my stomach
Please kill me... 
My finger nails cut through the bed-sheets 
Sweat drenches the whole bed
Soon, a tiny baby comes out
He wails and wails!
I sigh in relief, as I finally pass the difficult part 
As soon as he stops wailing, his marble eyes look at me.
They`re as delicate as a diamond
I pass a kiss on his cheek
``Welcome baby Ahmed, my radiant and celestial child.``
 

© 2017 Mr.Writer


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Oh my God! this literally made my jaw drop ! Oh dear... i was consumed by this poem... I din't expect it to be so beautiful... atleast not at all related to a mother...... The words are so apt.. The flow of poem is amazing... It intrigued me to read further and does build up a suspense... I don't know if i am correct in saying this but till how much ever i have read , This is your best work and definitely going in my library.... Hats off.... I don't have more adjectives to praise this work... Simply KUDOS!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Everyone has a mother and surely can relate to this. (Do test tube babies have mothers...hmmm...?)
Sweet.
I'm really watching you now...lmao
:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Haha - well I've had two eyes tatooed into the back of my head so ...lol
Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Ohh shoot! Better be careful then ;)
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Yup :)
........

Aw, this is lovely! I did think at first it was a horror story but you surprised me (again :))
I really like the description throughout and that very touching part about the baby's eyes. Lovely :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Awe thank you so much Tina!! :)
Tina H.W.

7 Years Ago

You are so welcome, Shaan :)
Amazing journey leading to very good ending.
"They`re as delicate as a diamond
I pass a kiss on his cheek
``Welcome baby Ahmed, my radiant and celestial child.``"
The above lines sensitive, tasteful and perfect. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote




Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you!! :) I really appreciate it :)
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
Woah! This is seriously wondrous. Something new that I've come across. All the descriptions are wonderful and all the lines beautifully formed. Really great work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Zoe! I really appreciate it :)
Zoya

7 Years Ago

you're welcome!
To me, this was like WOW! very vividly impresssive. I really am at a loss for more words.

Sorry the review is short BUT I really don't know what else to say.

Great piece Shaan.

Mark.



Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Mark! :) I`m really glad you enjoyed!
matrixmark

7 Years Ago

Thank you for sharing.


Mark.
"It's as if I'm in a ocean, struggling to swim and stay alive"

You portrayed this really well. There is no end to how a mother bears the pain and loves her child.
Nicely penned :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Yumna! :) You`re right, mothers love is special
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Years Ago

You're welcome, Shaan. 😊
Awesome, loved it Shaan really good one

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you Farhan! :)
Mother's rite...no words for their pain and their gratitude...just loved it...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you Surya!!! :) I really appreciate it

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Added on April 7, 2017
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Mr.Writer
Mr.Writer

Toronto, Ontario, Canada



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First of all... I love to write! It has always been my passion to write since... last year! :D I can easily pour my emotions in writing without telling them to anyone. I love to review people's work.. more..

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