Snakes! (Poem)

A mad snake slithered

In the weird, haunted forest

Looking for it's prey

Reviews

[Kathryn Smith]

Oooo I LOVE this!! Well written. I don't think it's too short. It's just enough for the imagination. :) xx

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you!! :)

[Paradox]

Its short.. Actually when u r writing about something visually charming, it is bttr to be descriptive. It does not look good when shortened. But when u r writing about something moral, which is abstract, short is very powerful.
This is what my person opinion is. I will make a request. Try rewriting this one.... In a descriptive manner... That will be visually vivid and much more charming.
Good experiment, though.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you! I'll make the changes soon

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Could be a person too, ya know ;P
Some people are like snakes, always hunting for their prey..
Nice, short read :)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome 😊

[Tina H.W.]

Reminds me of Mark's tormentor, 'Ray ' Great piece, Mr. Writer :)

[Mr.Writer]

Lol thank you so much Tina! :)
I agree, it does sound like Ray ;)

[Tina H.W.]

Always a pleasure, Shaan ;)

[CAPOLAVORO]

I felt like this is a Senryu than a Haiku. :)

[Mr.Writer]

Oh, ok :) Thanks for reviewing!

[Jessica Lima]

:) I don't know how I feel about this one... but not everything you write will appeal to everyone. Right?

[Mr.Writer]

Yeah :) true, thanks for reviewing

[Stacy Purvis]

😂😂😂 Adorable!
*looks around* Short, cute, hilarious read.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much!! It's really appreciated!

[Surya]

Haiku again...I must learn about these, haha,...well good job..:)

[Mr.Writer]

Thanjk you so much! :)