Can I have you back? (Poem)

Can I have you back? (Poem)

A Poem by Mr.Writer

My mind always thinks about you

The beautiful days I’ve spent with you

Especially cuddling into your arms


My mind always thinks about you

When I exchanged rings with you

The time when I was most happy having your back


Just one request, can I have you back?

Just one more chance, to fill in the gap that our relationship lacks?

Please… can I have you back?

© 2017 Mr.Writer


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Few second chances. I like the want and the wish in the poetry. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thank you Coyote! :)
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome my friend.
i was deeply touched....and hope is something you can have..when we lose someone that we love...atleast because of hope we can stay alive and smile a little...

emotions were true!...and the write was lovely!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Wajiha :))
Losing someone is a terrible pain,...
I can relate to it...
I enjoyed it Shaan...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Surya :)
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Gee
And no most probably the answer. The majority of splits are one sided often with the dumped having not the slightest inkling their time is up. No amount of begging and pleading can ever repair what the dumpee doesn't want repairing

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

True as well, thank you for reviewing! :)
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Those words
Are perfect
If only someone would say them

Perfect

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much!! :)
Your words of pleading show that no matter how intense our feelings become,the feelings of the other person may be on a different plain. Honest write of how many of us have felt at times.
Richie b.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Richie! :)
very well written...really it touches the heart with emotions.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you!
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BBP
The sweet words of a plea. This was a good write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank u!! :)
Oh..I see you suffer.... (....

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

:) Thank you lol
Can I have you back....It was a touching piece and like eveybody else has said the last lines are the killer lines that really make this a great ending to a great piece.

I do have one suggestion. Maybe put in a little bit about the splitting up bit. I feel it may add quite a bit more to an already touching piece. Like I say, just a suggestion.

Great piece, with or without my suggestion.

Mark.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Mark! :)

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Added on March 26, 2017
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Mr.Writer
Mr.Writer

Toronto, Ontario, Canada



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First of all... I love to write! It has always been my passion to write since... last year! :D I can easily pour my emotions in writing without telling them to anyone. I love to review people's work.. more..

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